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 Posted: Wed Nov 4 1:00:01 EST 2009 Post subject: what a nightmare |
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oh shit:
as words escape the throat,
the rapid fire of racing tracers
continues until one is jammed;
the hissing president, once grand,
becomes a hanging, whining note;
the smell of sulfur tickles noses.
it’s time to send the cleaning crew -
no time to stop and smell the roses
fast sinking in the rising crude.
a leggo chopper takes away
the casualties on display.
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| Posted: Wed Nov 4 19:59:59 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: what a nightmare |
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oh my! I can see how this would be a nightmare, for many on this planet. You have spoken to many groups of people in this B. regardless of whether or not they can see it.
The only thing I'm confused about is the "leggo" chopper. I'm quite sure it's something obvious that I'm not seeing. Leggo is also a brand name.
I like the grit here. Iron fist in the velvet glove and all that.
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| Posted: Thu Nov 5 10:54:57 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: what a nightmare |
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many thanks, teech! yep, i was referring to Leggo as in brand name (toy-maker), but since i haven't capped anything...
do you think i should cap Leggo?
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| Posted: Thu Nov 5 11:09:11 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: what a nightmare |
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all i can say is
Damn
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| Posted: Thu Nov 5 11:38:45 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: what a nightmare |
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thank you, arb! glad it evoked some emotions.....LOL!
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| Posted: Sat Nov 7 1:59:09 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: what a nightmare |
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Bad dream! Stop watching so much TV news! My dreams got better after I stopped watching the news. But just kidding, this is a good write...
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