touch the peeps of all the beaks
such a commotion of the birds
much is heard as she speaks
clutch and translate to words

flowing on the airy breeze
sowing sediments in the winds
growing in the sycamore trees
blowing kisses as it bends

Nice! I do not know what a Lento Poem is, so could you tell me?

Lento

A poetic form created by Lencio Dominic Rodrigues, the Lento is named after it's creator,
taken from his first name Lencio and rhymed to Cento, an existing form of poetry.

A Lento consists of two quatrains with a fixed rhyme scheme of abcb, defe as the second
and forth lines of each stanza must rhyme. To take it a step further, but not required, try
rhyming the first and third lines as well as the second and forth lines of each stanza in this
rhyming pattern: abab, cdcd. The fun part of this poem is thrown in here as all the FIRST
words of each verse should rhyme. There is no fixed syllable structure to the Lento, but
keeping a good, flowing rhythm is recommended.

For an added challenge, one may write a four-verse Lento and call it a Double Lento, or a
six-versed Lento to become a Triple Lento.

angeroseblue wrote:

Lento A poetic form created by Lencio Dominic Rodrigues, the Lento is named after it's creator, taken from his first name Lencio and rhymed to Cento, an existing form of poetry. A Lento consists of two quatrains with a fixed rhyme scheme of abcb, defe as the second and forth lines of each stanza must rhyme. To take it a step further, but not required, try rhyming the first and third lines as well as the second and forth lines of each stanza in this rhyming pattern: abab, cdcd. The fun part of this poem is thrown in here as all the FIRST words of each verse should rhyme. There is no fixed syllable structure to the Lento, but keeping a good, flowing rhythm is recommended. For an added challenge, one may write a four-verse Lento and call it a Double Lento, or a six-versed Lento to become a Triple Lento.

i'm impressed. again. indeed, my ignorance of poetry has no limits.

i am puzzled though about the second quatrain's winds / bends rhyme. also, should it be "translates"? other than that, a lovely job!

I thought that you would not be able to do such a thing so difficult! Youor words!!!

Another excellent find, arb. I'll definitely be attempting this.

You've written a very nice Lento.

I found this and thought to add it here cause of Christmas being just around the corner...nice job Libby.
Challenging at best. Now you've got me googling to find all kinds of this type of writing poetry so I can try my hand at it...but seeing Lencio Dominic Rodriguez, performance of the work I sit in awe at his talent to create such a masterpiece.
Thanks so much for the information I am sure I speak for the whole of gotpoetry members...
At least you made it to the top of the google search page. Now to find this work you only have to type in his name & it show up as you here! Good for you...girl? Now you'll have the whole world looking for this form of writing.
Anyhow here is the poem from the artist himself...I can only hope to be so good...<wink>
Author:

Lencio Dominic Rodrigues, United Arab Emirates



Poem



HOME FOR CHRISTMAS

Beneath the flickering lights of the alley,
Beside an unpainted wall,
Lays his home, overwhelmed by misery.
A company in his own self,
He alone, with no one else.
Amidst the garbage bins of the city,
Awaits him a gorgeous treat,
Delighted by the stalest morsel,
He thanks the Almighty,
For that corner on the dingy street,
As he devours the sumptuous meal.
Deep behind his hollow eyes, lies a smile,
Buried long ago in the past.
The color of soil equal to his rags.
No doubt as to what he wears,
Sometimes, a tattered muslin
Slips down his waist.
Estranged by society,
Cheated by destiny, he drifts,
Into another year, another Christmastide,
Making every street, a home to lie,
Under the canopy of starless sky.

allpoetry.com/Lencio%20Rodrigues

This is his poetry...site!

allpoetry.com/column/1767753

Here is some more help on this from the master himself...hope it helps.

wow noden
you did your homework
that is a beautiful piece ....and i will check him out

Always do, I was re-born one-day as a cat, now I am so god darn curious, but I love it...!

cya girl...

Your poem has a much more regulated meter.
I didn't even try to understand the pattern of words or syllables in Rodrigues' poem, at a guess I would say that there is no intentional meter pattern. But your pattern in syllables per line was S1: 7, 8, 6, 6 S2: 7, 8, 8, 7

It has good flow, the rhyming of the first word of each line for four lines creates a great sense of forward motion.

For slightly better flow I suggest maybe omitting one syllable from S1:L2 Either 'such (a) commotion of the birds' or 'such a commotion of birds'
Although it does depend on which syllables are stressed when one reads the poem.


I am assuming that the example of Rodrigues' work "Home for Christmas" was not an example of a Lento poem. I couldn't seem to work out any rhyming or meter structure, I'm guessing it's freeform.

lukaki26 wrote:

Your poem has a much more regulated meter. I didn't even try to understand the pattern of words or syllables in Rodriguez' poem, at a guess I would say that there is no intentional meter pattern. But your pattern in syllables per line was S1: 7, 8, 6, 6 S2: 7, 8, 8, 7 It has good flow, the rhyming of the first word of each line for four lines creates a great sense of forward motion. For slightly better flow I suggest maybe omitting one syllable from S1:L2 Either 'such (a) commotion of the birds' or 'such a commotion of birds' Although it does depend on which syllables are stressed when one reads the poem. I am assuming that the example of Rodrigues' work "Home for Christmas" was not an example of a Lento poem. I couldn't seem to work out any rhyming or meter structure, I'm guessing it's freeform.

Dude!!!
You don't understand go here and watch and learn from the pro himself ...as he is the one that created it...allpoetry.com/column/1767753

I've just looked at the site and I'm sure understand the structure of a Lento poem. I understood it from reading yours. It's simple.
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Two stanzas in a single lento, four in a double etc.

In each stanza the last word of line 2 and of line 4 must rhyme. The last word of line 1 and 3 can also, but not always.
As well as that the first word of each line of must rhyme (over the four lines of each verse). It seems that assonance is also allowed.


Composed in winter of Two Thousand Five, (a)
Proposed by my dreams, this entire theme, (b)
Exposed now for all to write and have fun, (c)
Supposed to be easy though it doesn't seem. (b)

Two verses of four lines each you will write, (d)
Do rhyme the beginning word in every line, (e)
Pursue to keep last rhymes in line 2 and 4, (f)
Chew your brain a little, you'll do just fine! (e)

I found this on the same page as you found the explanation you copied. It's much clearer.

I will try some.

Great poem, your attempt was most successful.
I stand by my opinion on the meter though, for me the second stanza has a nicer flow than the first.

Libby, I like your poem.