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Poems - Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
| | Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicamentby Ramonez
A green blur of a road sign;
Shitville, I think it read.
‘Over the next hill,’
my abductor confirms,
‘only ten more miles ahead.’
Flashes of glow worm eyes
in the rearview mirror,
he takes a deep drag
of an English fag,
then smirks - teeth silver.
On the passenger seat,
a potted plant he calls ‘Jules’;
he ashes on her leaves
and strokes her flower -
he giggles, and drools.
My bladder’s bursting.
The backseat’s uncomfortable;
the vinyl is ripped,
springs are poking through—
I spot a Coke bottle…
Wormeye’s leaning over,
he’s tuning the FM;
I’m leaning forward,
the skin of my cuffed hand
comes off – red custard.
Reception’s poor in the hills.
Wormeye struggles to find
Redneck FM for a while;
he shouts fuck-whore-cunt!,
and breaks off the dial.
The road is bumpy,
and the empty’s out of reach.
The speakers crackle
to a life distorted
from under the driver’s seat.
An unexpected turn,
left onto a gravel road;
Wormeye’s foot is heavy
on the brake pedal –
he grins – teeth now gold.
He points his gun at me,
coughs, and asks if I have
anything to say.
“Please pull the trigger,
I have kidney pains.”
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Re: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by Madyakka on Friday, November 20, 2009 (03:17:40) |
This is a scary one mate, it kind of reminded me of the Aussie movie Wolf Creek. If I had a dream like that I would keep a knife under my bed. Any chance of a continuation of this one?
Later
Dave
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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by Stonewing on Friday, November 20, 2009 (11:32:05) |
I may be demented but I got quite a chuckle from this. “Please pull the trigger,
I have kidney pains.”
Pythonesque! I loved it.
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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by butterflyzrfree on Saturday, November 21, 2009 (10:05:35) |
Quite a twist at the end! like this ending...
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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by maryanns on Saturday, November 21, 2009 (14:09:22) |
OMG, Ramon... I swear I've been there! Amazing write, love every single line you wrote. Way too real, even the ending! Cheers, my friend. Mary Ann
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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by nerdgirl on Saturday, November 21, 2009 (21:00:53) |
I saw the comments. good to know im not the only one who saw humor in that last line. Ive had "dont pee in the bed "dreams, nothing like this though. (mine had something to do with a toillet, a gorilla and a cliff...weird i know) great write!
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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 8: A Most Awkward Predicament
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by thewholesoul on Thursday, December 17, 2009 (14:37:09) |
truly gripping write ramonez. loved the imagry
best wishes
conor
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