| Author |
Message |
 Topic: Whisperer |
MystycLore
Replies: 2
Views: 790
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 Forum: Love Poetry Posted: Sat Apr 8 14:46:08 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Whisperer |
| I have some poems that I group together in the realm Mystyc Dream and most of them use thy. Not ment to be Shakesperian, just writing in an older tongue that's meant to be dreamlike. Sometimes it work ... |
| Topic: Whisperer |
MystycLore
Replies: 2
Views: 790
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Forum: Love Poetry Posted: Fri Apr 7 18:33:23 EDT 2006 Subject: Whisperer |
You come to me in twilight
Together we fly over the ocean
Silently you take my hand
We dance among the stars
Your face is masked
All I see
Are green eyes burning through me
They see my soul
Al ... |
| Topic: Machine |
MystycLore
Replies: 1
Views: 612
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Fri Apr 7 18:28:26 EDT 2006 Subject: Machine |
Cold
Mechanical
Emotionless
Overdriven
Impenetrable
This is how
I am programmed
Every minute
Divided
Into tasks
Nothing
Out of reach
I am not a scale
I need no balance
I am not a spr ... |
| Topic: form meditation |
MystycLore
Replies: 9
Views: 1572
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Forum: Small Poems Posted: Fri Apr 7 18:21:02 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: form meditation |
| Loving how it ends with a question giving the reader thoughts to ponder and makes you wonder now that you are meditating are you filling your mind with the answer to the question... |
| Topic: Irrelevance |
MystycLore
Replies: 10
Views: 1557
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Fri Apr 7 18:13:34 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Irrelevance |
| That drags it out for me and gives it the same degree as falling. Not what I wanted. Form wasnt even something I thought about playing with until a friend sent out a poem in the shape of a wine bottle ... |
| Topic: Irrelevance |
MystycLore
Replies: 10
Views: 1557
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Fri Apr 7 17:59:19 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Irrelevance |
| Maybe plummeting was just a bad word choice. Does anyone have anything better to describe a forceful drop? I would rather edit the word then the look on this one. |
| Topic: nature vs. nurture? |
MystycLore
Replies: 8
Views: 1065
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Fri Apr 7 17:57:26 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: nature vs. nurture? |
| The beginning is mesmorizing and brings you right in making you want to read more to see what happens. I love how you brought the waltz stanza alive. You can just hear the waltz in backdrop as you rea ... |
| Topic: Irrelevance |
MystycLore
Replies: 10
Views: 1557
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Fri Apr 7 17:19:09 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Irrelevance |
| I was trying for a quick descent, a forceful drop. |
| Topic: Ghost |
MystycLore
Replies: 3
Views: 801
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Forum: Love Poetry Posted: Fri Apr 7 0:28:26 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Ghost |
| Thank you both. Now that Spring is here, I hope to have more like this. |
| Topic: Shame |
MystycLore
Replies: 5
Views: 860
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Fri Apr 7 0:09:08 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Shame |
| Why the period? I found it to be distracting but that could just be me. ~curious ML |
| Topic: Lucky Me |
MystycLore
Replies: 1
Views: 581
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Forum: The Rewrite Workshop Posted: Thu Apr 6 23:47:51 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Lucky Me |
[quote="vinhthekid"]i need to finish editing this tonight. It's been too long.[/quote]
As this is not my element I have no critique of the poem but more of a ponderance. Why the urgency... You stat ... |
| Topic: Spring |
MystycLore
Replies: 1
Views: 663
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Thu Apr 6 23:32:16 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Spring |
May I suggest working on the format. At times writing less gives more, for example:
"denying the truth that while there may be storms releasing their end of season anger..."
denying truth
storm ... |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Thu Apr 6 22:09:37 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
[quote="arpeggio"]and from what i see, you both go to stevie nick's seamstress![/quote]
Arpeggio, have you been going through my closet AGAIN!! How many times must I tell you the lace is off limits ... |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Thu Apr 6 21:55:00 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
speaking of cliche's:better to be pissed off than pissed on
as for debating both sides: indecisive or brilliant...I'll let you decide 
I do agree the ending needed work, hence being posted t ... |
| Topic: Irrelevance |
MystycLore
Replies: 10
Views: 1557
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Thu Apr 6 21:37:12 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Irrelevance |
| This whole idea of playing with form is new to me. I'm finding it rather fun giving words life with placement. Perhaps I should lay off the color |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Thu Apr 6 21:33:04 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
hotstuff,
I didnt mean this particular piece. I was attempting to explain why I write in general and yes it's a sad piece. The majority of my winter writing is sad because of the depression I battl ... |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Thu Apr 6 18:41:54 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
| Arpeggio, you most likely wont like my other poems as well...They are never written "in an attempt to wring sympathy". They are my way of dealing with my life in a so called healthy manner. I only sho ... |
| Topic: Affliction |
MystycLore
Replies: 3
Views: 777
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Thu Apr 6 9:14:03 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Affliction |
| Hotstuff, that's the part I find difficult these days is length. I have poems that are two pages longs and some only 4 stanzas. I look at what I wrote 5 years ago and its in a different format. When i ... |
| Topic: wings |
MystycLore
Replies: 4
Views: 766
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Forum: Small Poems Posted: Thu Apr 6 0:06:03 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: wings |
| Much to your comment earlier to Silhouette...we do have similiar thoughts...I posted a poem this evening entitled Butterfly. Looking forward to reading more of your poetry. |
| Topic: Irrelevance |
MystycLore
Replies: 10
Views: 1557
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Forum: Broken Fingers Posted: Wed Apr 5 23:49:27 EDT 2006 Subject: Irrelevance |
TEE ING
TER
On the edge
Everyone
Says the wrong thing
I have nothing
Keeping me
From P
&n ... |
| Topic: Affliction |
MystycLore
Replies: 3
Views: 777
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Wed Apr 5 23:04:36 EDT 2006 Subject: Affliction |
[color=darkblue]
Dead to the world
I remain unearthed
Wandering the night
Hiding by day
No one knows me
The warmth of the day
Does not penetrate
Brackish mire
Under currents run high
Washi ... |
| Topic: Ghost |
MystycLore
Replies: 3
Views: 801
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Forum: Love Poetry Posted: Wed Apr 5 21:47:56 EDT 2006 Subject: Ghost |
[color=darkblue]
The night air envelops me
Caressing my tender skin
The wind whispers your name
I breathe deeply
My body gives way
And I fall into you
The world stops
The music plays
You an ... |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Wed Apr 5 21:26:09 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
Thank you all for the comments thus far.
Hotstuff, you have given me an idea...as much as I never thought of myself in that manner, what else do you call a child who raised herself in a world of ma ... |
| Topic: Silhouette |
MystycLore
Replies: 18
Views: 2034
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Wed Apr 5 10:53:53 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: Silhouette |
| Actually, the poem is about me... |
| Topic: the machine |
MystycLore
Replies: 3
Views: 599
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Forum: Post a poem Posted: Wed Apr 5 0:34:02 EDT 2006 Subject: Re: the machine |
| "rich with the scars left" can have several interpretations...to me that is wonderful...I read it has the scars make my life all the more richer for I can recognize the beauty in it...love the ending ... |
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