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Posted: Thu Nov 5 13:35:36 EST 2009 Post subject: Consensual |
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The universe expanded more last night –
I know, because again there is less air
to hold us up this early morning flight
across the vast expanse of “I don’t care”,
because my lungs again demand O2,
because my brain again amends the landscape
of everything we tried to say or do
and hides it well so deep inside the trance cave.
We’re holding hands, as cold November wind
blurs up the lens, chaffs lips and hides the weenie.
Oh well, another loss, another win -
who cares. This too shall pass, we both have seen it
so many times. Our other hands are free
to wave “so long”. I’m sure we both agree.
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 14:00:45 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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Lovely job, Boris! So many themes handled at once! Do you think such a grand poem deserves a word such as 'weenie'? Or was it hot dogs about which you were speaking?
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angeroseblue Compares Alliteration, Assonance & Rhyme


 
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 14:13:49 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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blurs up the lens, chaffs lips and hides the weenie.
your sonnets are very eye opening and if you have someone like me reading a poem please dont use the word weenie
my mind ...never mind...lol
enjoyed the sonnet b-man
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 14:19:35 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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many thanks, arb! i was just describing the effect of cold air on a weenie........ LOL
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 14:35:57 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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Well you seem to have gotton a lot of women all wound up about this!!! Watch out for the flying rocks!!!
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 14:52:59 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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| Well you seem to have gotton a lot of women all wound up about this!!! Watch out for the flying rocks!!! |

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butterflyzrfree Poet


 
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 16:44:16 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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Maybe you are getting too influenced by lash!!!! Hahahahah
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 17:03:53 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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yes, officer, i've been under the influence of lash lately.........
but i promise to clean up my act. 
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 18:21:20 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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It may be necessary to get out that whip for the lashing.....Ouch! Are there yellow teeth from his avatar involved?????
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angeroseblue Compares Alliteration, Assonance & Rhyme


 
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Posted: Thu Nov 5 23:39:17 EST 2009 Post subject: Re: Consensual |
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