IcarUS

Bogeyman

you can’t imagine the glide
right off the ledge of my pride
the tears I cried have all dried -
i haven’t cried since I died

I hope you know
nothing beats the glow
of a killing sun
on a chosen one

I hope you learned
just because it burned
doesn’t mean it’s bad
for a taddy mad

lash570

taddy mad-- oneslightly twisted??

you can’t imagine the glide
right off the ledge of my pride
the tears I cried have all dried -
and no more wet ones since I died

all in all- uinique-- gives me pause

Bogeyman

thank you, lash! yep, no more wet ones and glad it gave you much needed paws. Wink

Heera

I enjoyed most of this poem-- not necessarily the last two lines of the first stanza, although I can't exactly articulate why.

I particularly enjoyed the middle stanza. Nice!

mamta

neat write, B. but curious to know why it is posted in broken fingers. cos there is no punctuation, is it?

Bogeyman

Heera wrote:

I enjoyed most of this poem-- not necessarily the last two lines of the first stanza, although I can't exactly articulate why.

I particularly enjoyed the middle stanza. Nice!

thank you, Heera! the last to lines of S1 are kinda scary.....

Bogeyman

mamta wrote:

neat write, B. but curious to know why it is posted in broken fingers. cos there is no punctuation, is it?

thank you, mamta! i put this one here mainly because of the title. could've been elsewhere, but i had a gut feeling that the title gives it a surreal look at least on one of the layers.

did you see the car pushed off a cliff here? LOL