Suited up for another dance.
You've got moves, baby;
the way you side step,
back up, turn and run.

So flexible, with your
head up your backside.
Impressive footwork...
you managed to put yours
in your mouth again.

iwrite wrote:

Suited up for another dance. You've got moves, baby; the way you side step, back up, turn and run. So flexible, with your head up your backside. Impressive footwork... you managed to put yours in your mouth again.

I enjoyed this. It runs and turns like "baby". I might put "Dressed" rather than "Suited" at the beginning, to get a bit of alliteration and avoid the suggestion that baby is suited for another dance, but it's just a personal preference. The other thing is the ref to putting the foot in the mouth at the end. This appears abruptly without any previous hint, and takes the poem away at a tangent rather than rounding it off. What about adding something like:

when you said
I couldn't follow.

?
Just a suggestion - maybe not what you intended.

...soz couldnt help it...

nuff said

I think what wylde means is that " foot n mouth" is preceded by another insult,, there it shouldn't seems that abrubt

Interesting! I like the verbal slaps in the face. The part about putting their foot in their mouth is a little wordy for me, but I get the idea.