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#1: Single Life Author: lukaki26, Location: East Sussex, England

Posted: Sat Oct 1 17:02:21 EDT 2011
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Coasters don't use coasters,
we put our mugs where we like
and cook all our food in toasters.

Walk round in only loafers.
Not shaving, and misbehaving
with old Anna Nicole posters.

Making the most of single life
involves promoting onanism
almost every single night.

Get your camera linked to skype
I bet you're playing more
than just tiddlywinks tonight.

Last edited by lukaki26 on Tue Oct 4 6:00:29 EDT 2011; edited 1 time in total

#2: Re: Single Life Author: zoe_in_a_bubble,

Posted: Sun Oct 2 11:59:42 EDT 2011
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*chuckle*

#3: Re: Single Life Author: fogglethorpe, Location: Sonoran Desert

Posted: Mon Oct 3 20:11:36 EDT 2011
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Oh my goodness..S3 is freakin' great.

#4: Re: Single Life Author: lukaki26, Location: East Sussex, England

Posted: Tue Oct 4 5:59:22 EDT 2011
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Thanks, this was my favourite bit too. I think it could stand alone

#5: Re: Single Life Author: butterflyzrfree, Location: Miami,FL

Posted: Tue Oct 4 16:23:37 EDT 2011
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Love the progression.

#6: Re: Single Life Author: frank.m, Location: In the stix, NJ

Posted: Thu Oct 6 3:09:06 EDT 2011
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It was a bit weird to read at first, but going back a second time I liked the progression of it. I think I like S3 and 4 the most. I do think that L2 in S4 ends a bit abruptly. I just think its a bit short, like it needs an extra syllable. How about "I bet you're ready to play more" just a thought, but I feel that line just kinda flows more. All in all, I like the piece. I think its rather humorous. Definitely made me chuckle at the end.

#7: Re: Single Life Author: lukaki26, Location: East Sussex, England

Posted: Thu Oct 6 11:31:45 EDT 2011
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Coasters don't use coasters,
we put our mugs where we like
and cook all our food in toasters.

Walk round in only loafers.
Not shaving, and misbehaving
with old Anna Nicole posters.

Making the most of single life
involves promoting onanism
almost every single night.

Get your camera linked to skype
I bet you're playing with much more
than just your tiddlywinks tonight.

#8: Re: Single Life Author: ebe-one, Location: Houston, Texas

Posted: Wed Oct 26 21:09:23 EDT 2011
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pretty funny! the rhyme is a little awkward, but good

#9: Re: Single Life Author: pixietude, Location: California

Posted: Thu Oct 27 23:21:49 EDT 2011
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love it!! literally laughed out loud; brilliant.

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