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PostPosted: Wed Mar 12 11:41:46 EDT 2008    Post subject: i am Reply with quote

poetry dactyl poetry
the human finger
DAH-DAH yells a spondee
two stressed and too much
long and short , round about
trouchee
on the loose , unabridged ,
annapest

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PostPosted: Fri Mar 14 8:28:32 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

Cute, anna Smile

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PostPosted: Mon May 12 9:27:39 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

Nice how you play with words. Made me wonder about the complexity of poetry, and yet a good poem feels easy to read.
I got a sense of eroticism in it, if you meant it to be? You are a genius.
Lovely.

I think you might want to change the spelling on trouchee.
tro·chee troʊki/ [troh-kee]
–noun Prosody.
a foot of two syllables, a long followed by a short in quantitative meter, or a stressed followed by an unstressed in accentual meter. Symbol:
[Origin: 1580–90; < L trochaeus < Gk (poùs), trochaǐos running (foot), equiv. to troch- (var. s. of tréchein to run) + -aios adj. suffix]

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PostPosted: Thu May 15 6:05:43 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

Either this poem is beyond me or just really too odd, because I can't seem to find anything to either critique it on or even comment about it....sorry.
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PostPosted: Mon May 19 11:21:33 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

I don't get it. Spondee? Annapest?
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PostPosted: Tue May 27 2:36:18 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

hi . at the time i penned this , i was struggling with the aspects of the rhythm in metered rhyme . Now it is simpler but not any easier .
zhaul , the words are misspelled on purpose , even anapest is annapest . trouchy is to rhyme with grouchy as that was how i was feeling as i did my scansion exercises .
thank you . No there are no other implications in the poem , and yes you are free to read as your mind deciphers . A poem is penned by the poet and set loose , like a kite , with the threads holding back cut . SO my poem flies free , and the reader is free to read it as he /she deems .

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PostPosted: Sun Jun 8 15:46:33 EDT 2008    Post subject: Re: i am Reply with quote

8 lines of good times.

I am so useless at broken finger poetry. Laughing

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