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PostPosted: Sun Jan 24 20:25:53 EST 2010    Post subject: LIGHT! (a work in progress) Reply with quote

"LIGHT! LIGHT! BRING ON THE LIGHT!
Were it but softened to a dreary night.
The moon above in all it's age,
to bring forth beauty upon the stage!
LIGHT! Reflects within the silence,
parting ways through the madman's science.
He who holds so dear the knowledge,
the madman yet has to acknowledge.
Light, in all her ethereal beauty,
guides the sailors home from duty.
Who's blaze the sailors gaze upon,
to pull them through the red of dawn.
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PostPosted: Mon Jan 25 23:56:18 EST 2010    Post subject: Re: LIGHT! (a work in progress) Reply with quote

I like the classic vibe of this. One suggestion would be to tweak the meter so it keeps rhythm. Typo in L11.."who's" should be "whose".

I enjoyed reading it.
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PostPosted: Tue Jan 26 17:06:36 EST 2010    Post subject: Re: LIGHT! (a work in progress) Reply with quote

I echo Fog's comments. I can see this as a longer poem, perhaps to be performed.

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PostPosted: Tue Jan 26 17:18:54 EST 2010    Post subject: Re: LIGHT! (a work in progress) Reply with quote

Yep what the big dogs said. Good write.

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