Cling onto a life form,
one we think is dead
but is probably breathing.
Within the roots
lies a soul,
a comprehension
leveled by nature.

The Hope Tree is a
force known to quell minds
with its spiritual adolescence
and sound protection
from despair.
I find that the hungry
is not always hungry,
and therein lies
that truth.

I surround myself
with an acquisition
that replenishes mankind
when the last drop of tea is gone.

The Hope Tree lives.

tea is something is it not? and green tea is even better! green peace and yellow world, red skies and blue birdss,
I like this poem

This is a very creative and original tale and I love it! I wonder if you would like o add something besides hunger and human thirst to basic human needs to round it out a bit. 'That cut on your finger no longer hurts' or 'when you fell yesterday, that back pain you suffer-it is gone!"
Also, writing some descriptive phrase as to what sound protection is, that might help a bit. It could be two words, or an asterisk with paragragh. However you choose to clarify. I am excited because I find this a very clear, every understandable poem, which sometimes people seem to have trouble there. Also, with a nip and a tuck, you could make this one magnificent!

alana wrote:

tea is something is it not? and green tea is even better! green peace and yellow world, red skies and blue birdss, I like this poem

''Yes, tea is the best! My family drinks it every day. Green tea is a very good tea, yes!

A couple of points of expression:

"Cling unto" should, I think, be "cling onto" or simply "cling to". "Unto" is an obsolete word and doesn't seem to fit the context anyway.

"I surround myself around an acquisition" makes no sense to me. I would suggest replacing "around" with "with" or "by".

I agree with Rory about the first line, but apart from that the rest of the piece is beautifully thought provoking

Ozymandias wrote:

A couple of points of expression: "Cling unto" should, I think, be "cling onto" or simply "cling to". "Unto" is an obsolete word and doesn't seem to fit the context anyway. "I surround myself around an acquisition" makes no sense to me. I would suggest replacing "around" with "with" or "by".

Thank you, Rory. That is good advice and I will make myself a little more clear. The term "cling onto" is correct.

im not gonna say I understood this entirely. but the first verse reminded of a book I read by orson scott card with the tree being alive and having a soul