alright ive never done this before so im going to try it

his eyes burn through me
melting my insides
turning me hot
makeing me liquid


alright now lets see where you take it

his eyes burn through me
melting my insides
turning me hot
making me liquid

I grip his shoulders
feeling his power
I start to fall
begin to flow through him

i'm not sure this fits...or if this is what you're going for, anyways how you been?

Karina08 wrote:

his eyes burn through me melting my insides turning me hot making me liquid I grip his shoulders feeling his power I start to fall begin to flow through him i'm not sure this fits...or if this is what you're going for, anyways how you been?

well that all depends cuz with that one someone can take it as a love poem or a dieing poem or however you would put that
and ive been pretty good how about you?

A little of and a little of . I hope you're doing better. Are you still bummed out? I'm worried 'cause spring break is coming up and I'm not going to be able to visit this site in over a week , I'm going to my gramma's house in the country to get away from "problems" and feel sad 'cause she doesn't have a computer. Well anyways I promise to write some poetry over break and then post it so you can read it...ok take care. Oh! and I'll work on this poem some more even though I'm not very good and post it so you can comment. Maybe you should write one version and I'll write another, then we can post it and decide which is best or take parts from each and combine them.

Karina08 wrote:

A little of and a little of . I hope you're doing better. Are you still bummed out? I'm worried 'cause spring break is coming up and I'm not going to be able to visit this site in over a week , I'm going to my gramma's house in the country to get away from "problems" and feel sad 'cause she doesn't have a computer. Well anyways I promise to write some poetry over break and then post it so you can read it...ok take care. Oh! and I'll work on this poem some more even though I'm not very good and post it so you can comment. Maybe you should write one version and I'll write another, then we can post it and decide which is best or take parts from each and combine them.

lol im sorry about you not being abell to get to a computer and the week is almost over and i cant wait to read your poems and ill work on one version that sounds really cool

what's the deal with the poll?