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Poems - Things once counted

Things once counted

by Brennan

A light across a river sways,
where children wasted summer days.
Not near, not far, but in between,
the grass grows soft and tall and green.

The whispers dance among the trees,
where hands once rested on lover’s knees.
And all the flowers last forever,
when fingers slip and lace together.

Now indents in the earth remember,
when days were long and feet were tender.
The sun was high and far away,
and the moon shone bright well into day.

So see the world with a single glance,
the simple things leave up to chance.
Begin at once and last forever,
for things once counted never weather.

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Re: Things once counted (Score: 1 )
by Cpt_Smithy on Tuesday, July 07, 2009 (03:52:08)

Made me smile with thoughts of my childhood.

Sincere and well structured.

Nice work

Cpt Smithy

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Re: Things once counted (Score: 1 )
by rondo on Tuesday, September 15, 2009 (23:10:33)

has a great flow...........and soothing feelings

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Re: Things once counted (Score: 1 )
by crazydiamond68 on Wednesday, December 16, 2009 (23:42:20)

The closest to perfect I have read.
Good to read and better to speak.
You have captured something wonderful here, wondrous because it is something the reader can internalize and relate to in their own experience and that can be done in a million different ways. The impermanence of Terra Firma and the things we hold dear, you really nailed this well.
Thank you for posting.
~Diamond

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