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Poems - Do you realize?
| | Do you realize?by deepali
Cast again
that loving glance,
let me have my fill..
hold me tight
in your arms,
as moving clouds, hold still..
place luscious lips on mine
with love,
shall die, if you refrain..
to drink with you that godly wine
I hope,
in vain again..
that road of yours
is no good one, i'm telling you
for sure..
this narrow path, just next to the brook
is one,
you should endure..
and as you reach it's end, you'll see
a valley full of flowers..
with chirping birds
and thatched roof hut
whose door is left ajar..
this place is where
i plan to stay,
with you, till we suffice..
that fist like hut,
bit red and grey,
called heart, if you realize..
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Re: Do you realize?
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by BrokenWordsPoet on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:00:52) |
This truly speaks to the dwelling within and the waiting soul. Beautiful... There seems to be a missing: the. Beautiful still...
the narrow path, just next to brook
is one,
you should endure..
In hopes for peace... BWP... James...
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:13:42) |
Dear James, thanks so much. i needed that advice, it's precious!!
the narrow path, just next to brook
is the one,
you should endure..
does it sound ok now? please, stay with me, at GP, i'm learning! Thanks again. warm wishes, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by BrokenWordsPoet on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (10:10:16) |
just next to brook, sounds like a name.
just next to the brook, is more like a place.
I should have made myself more clear.
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (10:30:44) |
Got it!! done. Thanks again!
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Re: Do you realize?
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by Tiku on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:14:00) |
what a sweet ink!!you stole my heart with the last stanza.keep your ink flowing.loved it.
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:23:37) |
Thanks a ton, Tiku for taking out time to read and appreciate!! feeling great!
warm wishes, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by alana on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:19:14) |
why do you use the word endure for the path deepali? what does your name mean, to be very deep? but in what?
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (09:50:50) |
Dear Alana, thanks a lot, for taking out time for reading and commenting!
I feel, his road is leading to greener pastures while the path to my valley is narrow and muddy. going downhill is assumed to be enduring..i state this to him in all humbleness.
my name, it means a row of earthen lamps that illuminate a dark night!
thanks for taking interest and this beautiful way of complimenting!!
lots of love and warm wishes, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by elixandor on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (10:12:25) |
loved it!!
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, August 16, 2011 (11:03:05) |
Thanks elixandor! LOL, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by TygerTyger on Thursday, August 18, 2011 (11:20:50) |
Deepali. This is just the most stunningly Beautiful poem onLove. I have ever read. It flows like a river. every line is just sublime. You don't get better than this. So, I give you a 10, and a heart. Well done. Pete. Tyger Tyger. LOL .
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Thursday, August 18, 2011 (12:00:42) |
Dear Tyger, you made my day!! such praise would make any pauper a princess!! this 10 i accept most humbly and the heart, hope has all the lovely flowers around it! love both!! with all warm wishes and tons of love, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by K13739 on Friday, August 19, 2011 (12:52:00) |
What a beautiful love poem, Deepali. Lovely images and the rhythm is amazing. Thank you for sharing.  -- Paula.
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Saturday, August 20, 2011 (07:10:27) |
Thanks a ton, dear Paula. i'm so happy you liked it. please stay in touch, love and warm wishes, deepali
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Re: Do you realize?
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by K13739 on Saturday, August 20, 2011 (07:36:07) |
I would like to add you to my buddy list so I can find your poems easily. Take good care. -- Paula.
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Saturday, August 20, 2011 (08:29:14) |
more so, would love to be your buddy
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Re: Do you realize?
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by Arsaces on Monday, September 26, 2011 (16:16:46) |
Many souls seek it few find it. Nicely written and a most enjoyable read. Arsaces
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Re: Do you realize?
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by deepali on Tuesday, September 27, 2011 (07:47:38) |
Only those who don't get it, know it's true value! Thanks so much, for your appreciation! love and warm wishes, deepali.
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