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Poems - Musical Chairs
Just too damned additive. Somber morning solstice simply came and went
Oh thank you so much, James. Poetry is quite addictive for me too - I sure missed gp yesterday! Anyway, if I disappear I will be back as soon as possible, no worries.
Cheers and hugs my good friend - Your bud, Mary Ann
Thank you so much, my friend - I'm really glad you enjoyed the poem. Best wishes, Mary Ann
happy to read this
So good to hear from you - Cheers, Mary Ann
Thank you Paul and your frosty footed ballet hound.
Hugs and wear your woolies, Mary Ann
ps: How is your alphabet coming along?
though the trip gets longer and longer, with each passing day.
Have a grand tomorrow…Jack
I'd rather write of fairies than real life lately.
Thank you smiles and hugs, Mary Ann
Thank you, Bonnie - it sure seems like fairyland around here.
Smiles and hugs, your bud Mary Ann
It's always so much fun to enjoy your comments, Ron...
Happy January, Mary Ann
Wishing you smiles and happiness, Mary Ann
Well, we're finally able to get out of our driveway safely again, the snow is starting to melt so off we go to see what's up! Ha-ha, living on the hillside we're probably the last to know... LOL!
Thanks so much, my friend - smiley Mary Ann
Mary. I enjoyed the
fantasy-rhythm of words.
Very magical. It's also a great
message of joy and being togetger.
Hi and great big
smiles back at you...
I'm so happy you smiled
when you read my fairy tale!
Your story buddy, Mary Ann
I have tried to adjust here and there, to give a more constant and consistent structure. as follows..
In a clearing by a cottage in a forest by a stream
beneath a lonely willow tree a fairy had a dream
that once upon a time a nymph, whose orchestra could bring
such music to the clearing so that all her friends could sing
those sweet and peaceful melodies, now carried on the wind
to sail throughout the winter and then on into the spring.
She wrote a dozen letters, invitations filled the air
they rose like dainty snowflakes up into the atmosphere
she sang her fond farewell to them and let them drift aloft
whereon, she sadly shed a tear and watched them disappear
the snow began to sprinkle little sparkles in her hair
throughout all of the forest and then far away from here.
The somber winter solstice came as simply as it went
to the silence of the clearing where no orchestra was sent
upon a disenchanted note she sadly sent her prayer
for the cottage in the clearing felt so cold and oh so bare...
would children from the cities ever come and visit here
throughout all of the year, were we to make musical chairs?
I still feel the last line needs some more thought and perhaps a complete re-thought, but overall there is a joyous and engaging feel to this poem
I love what you did with it and I don't think you changed the meaning of it at all... let me think about it a bit and then I'll see to revising it in the near future.
Again, thank you so much for your help; great job - truly appreciated!
Smiles and cheers, Mary Ann
Peace & Laughter...Harry
Thanks with reggae on in the background. Cheers, Mary Ann
Added on: 19-Jan-2012 | Hits: 370 |
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