Intuition Disaster

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an excellent piece sammi, nicely done

I am writing about the ghosts too madame
my name is Gary and I enjoyed your poem
this day from where I sit in the great city London
Having sailed away to greener pastures may the lord
bless you

Looove that first line! Sweet and draws you into the poem that evolves into something vry vivid and compelling. WArm wishes and happy thoughts! Tasha

Ah, the fact of contradictions assembling and disassembling themselves within lends an eerie shade to the dawn... to set it free or let it lie writhing internally begs the question. Drawn in, I found no answer evident. Love your work, Sammi - Cheers, Mary Ann xoxo

Re: Intuition Disaster (Score: 1 ) by FuchsiaFestival! on Saturday, January 28, 2012 (16:17:10)

I thank you, my friend ! May happiness shine bright in your arms! I love the light that glows, and those contradictions are falsetto! They are high-pitched evidence, totally. Lots of love. xoxo


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Ah, you're killin' me on abstractions, Sammi! I wish my mind could work that way - but still, it's enough to make me pause and give great consideration at it - and that's a skill and it's also a compliment to you.

When I read: "Silence raises an eyebrow?" I immediately said: "Huh? What?" like Don Draper confronted by a messy moment in life and eventually settled on "Hmm." Should it read: "Between two characters" though?

I'll have to come back to this one at a morning sometime when my mind isn't nearly fried from the day's activities as I'm sure I'll be able to take more from it - and it's certainly worth much more than my cursory read.

j.p.

Re: Intuition Disaster (Score: 1 ) by FuchsiaFestival! on Thursday, February 23, 2012 (22:34:55)

This is one of my more abstract poems, but sometimes abstraction works best (in my honest opinion). This is because expression comes in a more personal way when abstraction is made. If a person wants to write a poem for others, then they should write for a certain society, but if it is for their own personal reference, I usually prefer abstract. You have intelligent comments, Jason. "Silence raises an eyebrow" is a contradiction. When a person speaks, their eyes have expression, so "raising the eyebrow" would be the speaking part, but the fact that silence is there, "silence speaks." Speech tells people that they are supposed to sleep, so there is no peace: two characters, which are shame and distress, are compartmentalized in the sleepers' souls, and they are informed that they have to sleep alone, although it doesn't necessarily say it in the poem. They are falling away from each other. They are insecure.


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