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A charming little piece, Jack, gives me a sort of warm glow! Thank you for posting it.

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Thursday, February 09, 2012 (07:32:24)

Thanks Rory, ‘tis a true story, I’ve been feeding this night caller for some time now; if the footprints get bigger I may stop. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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oh, is he a ferret or a dog or cat? I hope that it is not a person, if it is a person, this is a sad poem indeed.

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Thursday, February 09, 2012 (12:41:05)

I am touched my your concern but rest assured the smallness of its padded feet left me to believe it to be the size of a cat or maybe a skunk or raccoon. Thank you and have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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Oh, this one's just so sweet, Jack... I love the mystery of it but most of all that the little fellow, of whatever species it may be, is getting something to eat! You're such a sweetheart! - Cheers, Mary Ann

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Thursday, February 09, 2012 (16:11:55)

Thanks Mary Ann, It’s probably not something I would care to have as a pet or it could be a throwaway pet, get a few of them from time to time. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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Your poem makes me smile, as well as fills me with gratitude that are are kind people like you who will take the time to care enough to feed this little night visitor. As Mary Ann said, it's nice to know that he/she has something to eat each night, thanks to you!!

Sandy

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (08:11:26)

Thanks Sandy, but I’m getting a little worried that this little something may have a large family, so far it seems to be just one. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (09:07:12)

Thanks Sandy for that nice comment. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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lovely! wow how cute! a little nighttime stray, isnt it funny the lovely interdependent relations humans strike up with animals?! i think im always the more dependent one when it comes to animals....so cute! hav you come up with a name for him/her yet?
im jealous, i need to find myself a stray!
great write, i feel like the world is a better place hearing stories like that!
max

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (08:12:12)

You sound like my neighbor, she takes in any stray that comes by. She has a family of raccoons in her barn. I don’t think I would go that far. Thanks for the comment Max and have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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a warm little ditty that speaks volumes of humanity...nice work poet

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (11:12:20)

Thanks Ron, it’s no big deal. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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I totally agree with the others. A very charming tale. )Or could that be tail? ;¬)
You have one typo near the end, where I believe you meant "tiny", not tinny. And the final stanza seems a little off the tempo, especially the first line:
"They blink, blink on and off!
I was thinking it might work smoother if you used the repetition twice, like
They blink, blink on and blink, blink off
similarly, the final line could be extended
and use the start of the penultimate line, so the complete final stanza might look like this:

They blink, blink on and off
as he eats from my tray,
he’s just a little something,
he's my little nighttime stray.

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by Danny-R on Friday, February 10, 2012 (13:34:12)

Oops, I missed the edit to the first line. should be

They blink, blink on and blink, blink off
as he eats from my tray,
he’s just a little something,
he's my little nighttime stray.


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Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (14:48:33)

Thanks Danny for jumping in, and for pointing out that “tiny” boo, boo. I appreciate your input. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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What a lovely write Jack. Good on you for feeding the critters. Well done. A 10 and a heart. take care. best wishes. Pete. LOL .

Re: The night caller (Score: 1 ) by MoZark on Friday, February 10, 2012 (20:51:49)

Thanks Pete, really nice to hear from you. that little guy don’t get hear soon his supper will be frozen. Thanks again, have a grand tomorrow…Jack


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