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Poems - Can You tell me WHY...

Can You tell me WHY...

by romeo_blackhearted

Why do the rich
Get things free, is it
To influence to get my last dollar
Out of me,

Why do consider
A man getting all the women
Living the life, instance of
A man being faithful
And devoted to his wife,

Why do we say we need
When it’s people in Africa
That don’t got the nessanities

Why is doing all you can
For the one you love not enough
When they go and mess up
Breaking your heart, tearing you up

Why can we do what is wrong
Easier than what’s is right
Why haven’t we realize
What’s done in the dark
Comes out in the light

Why do the young want to grow
So fast, why is it that we
Rather talk to the girl showing it all
Instead of the one not showing her ass
Why is it that women get with the sorry guys
And let the good ones pass

Why is it that we spend our hold check
Just to have on what we consider in style
Why is it that we can make a baby
And not take care of our child

Why can we smoke cigarettes
When we know it takes away from our live
Why is it that we can go to church
And not make that 10% sacifare

The whys can continue just like
The answers as well
Why this why that
Don’t we all have a story a tell…

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I think that the ide (Score: 1 )
by mandabean on Thursday, June 07, 2007 (01:55:01)

I think that the idea behind this is fantastic. You have a great poem here. It does seem a little overwhelming without punctuation or line breaks. You might try separating the lines into stanzas also; this would strengthen the poem a lot. Your rhyme is good; I like how you have hidden rhyme in addition to the more obvious. Very well done. This is good already, but will be awesome with a bit of polishing.

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