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Poems - RAGING STORM
| | RAGING STORMby dav.smith
He cringed under the bed sheets
he hated these Raging storms
The smashing and crashing of the thunder
and rage filled lightning
He couldn't stand the roaring and bellowing
or the shuddering of the lightning striking
under these sheets he could hide
from the angry clouds that hovered so close
He remembered the last Raging storm
how it had bruised his little mind
and how he cried with the raining and hid for hours after
not coming out till it was fully passed and calm
O' how he hates these Raging storms
that come more frequent and have grown larger
and how he suffers more after each storm
if only, he thinks, if only his mum would stay off these drugs
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by misty678 on Monday, February 13, 2012 (09:51:03) |
Good write
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Monday, February 13, 2012 (13:30:50) |
Thank you kindly for your read and comment. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by TygerTyger on Monday, February 13, 2012 (16:45:45) |
Gosh Dave. what a powerful poem. the last line is so impacting, and so sad. i hope it's not true for you, but I sadly think it must be for many. Well done. take care Mate. A 10 and a heart. pete. LOL .
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (03:47:38) |
No It was not I Pete. We read of child and drug abuse way to often. And sadly one habit creates the other, thanks dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by mennikatz on Monday, February 13, 2012 (18:11:37) |
A sad truth beautifully expressed - this is close to my heart. God Bless You, Mary
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (03:49:01) |
Mary I am sorry for jolting a painful memory. One hopes that it rest well behind you and the future brings only joy. Peace and Hugs dAVE
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by mennikatz on Saturday, February 18, 2012 (07:30:46) |
Thanks Dave. Last word alcohol for me but I'm not upset, memories only sad now not painful, there's been a lot of water under the bridge. I'm OK now, really. May the angels be with you always, Mary
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by Ramonez on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (01:35:55) |
Didn't expect the last line, Dave. Really enjoyes this one, mate.
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (03:51:41) |
Master, thank you for the warm comment. It means a lot coming from a excellent writer of you caliber. Be well Be safe my dear friend. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by alana on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (06:16:52) |
more than meets the eye of the reader, great poem, Mr. Smith, hello
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (07:16:33) |
Hello, Alana, Yes one should not expect the straight forward with my work. The truth is some times hidden amongst the moment of the poem. CheersdAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by MoZark on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (09:36:54) |
This lit a smoldering flame; a thirteen-year-old boy at the top of the stairs with a bigger then he shotgun waiting for the drunken rage and vowing not again; luck intervened and a deep love and friendship survived for many years. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (13:39:18) |
Glad to hear he has found a supportive friend Jack. Be well, be safe. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by maryanns on Tuesday, February 14, 2012 (16:07:30) |
Drugs leave such ugly scars on children ... living through a constant raging storm inside. Yours is truly a heart wrenching and poignant poem. Best wishes, my friend - Mary Ann
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Wednesday, February 15, 2012 (03:16:20) |
Mary Ann thank you for your kind words. Children always end up the ones that suffer, Even long after the drugs are gone from the scene. Hugs to you my friend. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by Ozymandias on Wednesday, February 15, 2012 (04:13:36) |
Sad but strong. Avoids easy sentimentality. A good one, Dave!
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by dav.smith on Wednesday, February 15, 2012 (06:15:23) |
Ah, Rory my favorite Critic. thank you for you words of kindness. Be well Be safe my friend, dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by Iridium on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (13:45:42) |
wonderful metaphor and a brillinat ending, wonderful.
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (13:55:44) |
Thank you. What does one do to help these children get through the 'Storms'? Just being there for them is not enough some times. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by Iridium on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (14:02:52) |
I have been a drug addict for 30 years and only recently am in recovery...for 4 years now. I never wanted any chilfren becasue of this very thing. I don't have an answer to your question, not having children was the only thing I did right.
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (14:15:03) |
Glad to hear you are in recovery, It must of been hard for you. It explains why we FEEL through your poetry. Thank you for that. My prayers and support are with you. dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by Zbird on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (18:40:24) |
a great metaphor about one of the saddest truths of life today.
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Saturday, March 17, 2012 (06:41:53) |
Bonnie, sorry for the late reply. We find the truth the hardest thing to accept at times. But it is truth that we want, and sadly it can be painful to hear. Hugs dAVE
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by deepali on Sunday, February 19, 2012 (22:26:06) |
This brings forth so many emotions...
wonderful write!
warm wishes,
D.
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Re: RAGING STORM
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by dav.smith on Saturday, March 17, 2012 (06:44:21) |
Ali, thank you for your kind words. Some where along life's journeys WE all have felt this stone in our shoe, the thing we need to do is stop and remove it before it hurts us too much. Hugs dAVE
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