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Shallow waters

by Ozymandias

children are splashing
in the shallowest water
while suns are setting




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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by dav.smith on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (02:11:04)
A wonderful and refreshing read Rory, Sunsets and water's edge, always go together. Sadly the winter is upon us so the children best enjoy it while they can. Cheers my friend dAVE

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (02:12:49)
    Thanks Dave, glad you enjoyed it!

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by Zbird on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (08:02:29)
what a lovely tranquil scene! beautifully done!

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (18:52:18)
    Thank you Bonnie.

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by electrictiger on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (08:14:56)
i love this! i love the plural sun most and all the interesting things that says!

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (18:53:32)
    I'm glad somebody picked up on that. It wasn't accidental. The reference to shallow waters isn't accidental either! Thanks Tige.

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by deepali on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (08:36:30)
catching that blissful moment!
fond regards,
D.

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Thursday, April 12, 2012 (18:53:55)
    Thank you Deepali.

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by ossy on Friday, April 13, 2012 (02:42:33)
Oh how I can relate to this for when I was a lad I used to go down to my village stream to savor the peaceful serene it provides. I'd watch her purity sublime beauty, praying my soul a pristine fate as the streams. Its one thing I miss so much now especially when I'd been urbanized but your piece Rory brought before that picture. Thanks

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Friday, April 13, 2012 (03:33:28)
    And I thank you, Ossy, for the kind comment and especially for the lovely words you used to describe your past. Why don't you write something on that theme? I could really foresee an excellent poem coming from you.

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by fogglethorpe on Friday, April 13, 2012 (12:28:20)
A vivid image. Expertly penned.

I am intrigued by the plural of "sun"..it individualizes the children, suggesting that each experience is unique, and yet it speaks to something universal as well. It reminds me of the philosophical idea of analogy of being.

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Friday, April 13, 2012 (17:22:40)
    Thanks Hugh. It's interesting how readers can find things in poems that the poet had not thought of! I was thinking of how each human being can be said to have a sun (an ideal or guiding light) of one kind or another, and the poem is really analogical - like children, we play around in shallow lives while our "suns" are rapidly reaching their ends.

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      Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
      by electrictiger on Monday, April 16, 2012 (20:05:22)
      It could also be read to suggest many worlds and many children in a very large universe. I like that the poem does not unravel the meaning for the reader, and that it invites thought. Sorry for intruding! I came back to this poem again because it is fascinating.

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        Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
        by Ozymandias on Monday, April 16, 2012 (20:34:37)
        I guess the waters in it run deeper than I thought! Smile

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Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
by MoZark on Saturday, April 14, 2012 (08:45:59)
The struggle of new life as the same moves west. Have a grand tomorrow…Jack

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    Re: Shallow waters (Score: 1 )
    by Ozymandias on Saturday, April 14, 2012 (12:26:58)
    Thank you Jack.

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