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Good write

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, May 06, 2012 (11:10:19)

Misty..thanks for reading it.


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A pleasure reading this poem.
Thanks for introducing to this form!
warm wishes,
D.

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Monday, May 07, 2012 (11:07:37)

Thanks D. The form is rimas dissolutas, which grants the writer a lot of latitude.


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I love this form (what is the name for it)? - so well done - you have so few syllables to work with and have captured a brilliant thought perfectly.

Sandy

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Monday, May 07, 2012 (11:08:24)

Hi Sandy..thanks. It is a rimas dissolutas, but the descending syllable count is something that just came naturally.


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fine piece, hugh! delicate but powerful

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Tuesday, May 08, 2012 (18:04:38)

Kyle..love that description. Thank you my friend.


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I have a bias against very short poems I'm still combatting. This poem, which I like a good deal, may help me do it! It's a great example how the rules of form can enhance a piece. A lot of meaning is packed into 18 words. For example the line break sin-/ewy suggests the break from gravity's hold. "Feathers" and "tethers" bring animals subliminally into each stanza: birds and horses with their implication of lightness and heft. The poem is a small gem with many subtle facets! Bravo!

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, May 13, 2012 (17:54:57)

Thanks for that. And you are right on about "sin/ewy"..also, the first half of the word is "sin" and that bolsters the metaphor of gravity as the nearly uncontrollable fallibility of our earthly lives.


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loved this is the forums, you know i'm already fascinated with the subject. this is a brilliant take on the topic.

Re: Rapture (Score: 1 ) by fogglethorpe on Sunday, May 27, 2012 (19:47:00)

Chris..thanks. I enjoyed our discussion in the forums.


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The play on 'sin' is cleverly done here.