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Fabulous!! *applauds*.. Phoebe

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, May 23, 2012 (18:44:58)



I can hear your applause on the other side of the Tasman Sea!

Thanks Phoebe!


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Very cool lay-out. "And immediately" is like the poem's sun, separating ideas vertically and horizontally. The pachyderm in question is probably death, and the elderly here, his "rich pickings!" So this is dark poem with a cold protagonist delivered with jaunty wit and creative moxie. What a sweet contrast! It's not too much to say this piece is brilliant! The stanzas swerve as if the avoid the intrusion of mortality.

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, May 23, 2012 (18:47:51)

I appreciate the detailed commentary. I must say, however, that the elephant is not death, at least not in my intention, though I acknowledge the right of the reader to use his own interpretation. Do you know the phrase "the elephant in the room" for something that disrupts the ordinary comfortable routine of life? That's what I had in mind.


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Cheerio! What good rich fun. I love that he is wearing a tuxedo!

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, May 23, 2012 (21:48:10)

I have a dream... one day I will see an elephant in a tuxedo!

Thanks GG.


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I often feel like the elephant in the room!
I enjoyed reading your poem Oz.
How clever!

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Thursday, May 24, 2012 (18:47:35)

Please adjust your tuxedo before accepting my thanks for the kind comment....


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Now you know how I feel. Can't help it, it is kill myself or live with the noise; I chose the later and everybody else be damned. Pass the beans and chicken.

BWP... Very artistically done Rory...

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Thursday, May 24, 2012 (18:48:21)



Good onya, James!


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G'day Rory...
You filled the page (room) nicely with your poem Rory. Yes, that elephant certainly stands out alright, but of course the comments aren't favourable.
We've all met this bloke Rory.
Thanks mate
Lindsay

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Thursday, May 24, 2012 (21:28:44)

I would invite him to sit down but he might break the furniture!

Thanks Lindsay.


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Rory! I thoroughly enjoyed this one...for the meaning...the imagery...and the unique structure! I really loved it..and it made me smile. I and others in my family have shied away from that same elephant MANY times. Even though we leave him to himself in any room he appears...he NEVER takes the hint to take a permanant hike! Of course,...then again, why would he? He just takes over and as you say....he gains much fodder each time he returns and grows larger each time...until...one day...he will fill the room so completely, that no one will escape the room without getting crushed in some way. Anyway...I DO hate that coarse glutton of an elephant. GREAT work.

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Friday, May 25, 2012 (02:20:11)

I'm surprised this one is so popular. It got hardly any comments in the forums. And I would have thought it was a bit too "modern" for most people. Shows how much I know, eh?


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A clever writ with a classic touch.

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Friday, May 25, 2012 (04:20:59)

Thanks Ossy!


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Oh Ozy - what a great way to get such wonderful laugh at the end of this day! What visuals you have depicted (not to mention the sound effects) - gotta love those elephants!

Sandy

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Sunday, May 27, 2012 (18:39:41)



Thanks Sandy!


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Really enjoyed this, Ozzyman. I read 1984 again the other day, and there's a weird and strangly similar feeling I get from reading that book and your poem. Well done, mate.

Re: the elephant in the room (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Tuesday, May 29, 2012 (23:23:09)

It's interesting the way different people see things. I had no thought at all for the Orwell novel as I was writing this. But good for you if you see some connection there!

I married in 1984.... you never know, I guess


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