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Aloha Rory...
How often that a 'dark' moment of thought can relay the muse within the best and least of US... of the many works you have posted this perhaps provides a 'tell' of the internal battle which we will all face... that "time" reveals to all of US the truth of "Life's bitter gaze"... In this moment of my own reflections, I find myself with you as friend... in this subject... in search for "some better phrases, sparkling with new light"... and morbidly finding none... each phrase of this work... and very much each line and mood of thought reflect within my life some moment, event, and/or person... quite the catch Rory... of my many foul balls hit... all of the best from this life, to you, and all of your relations... Michael.

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Tuesday, July 10, 2012 (19:06:56)

I am touched by the kindness of your words, Michael. I hasten to assure you that actually I am physically and psychologically fine! But in most of my poems what I do is imagine myself into a situation which then touches me somehow. This poem came out of reading what is probably the greatest novel ever written by an Australian, "The Fortunes of Richard Mahoney" by Henry Handel Richardson. There is a wonderful chapter in it which describes the slow death from cancer of a prominent politician, who is at first visited by polite friends who gradually come less and less often. It's gut-wrenching stuff and I couldn't get it out of my system. Eventually this poem fermented inside me and forced me to write it.


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Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Michaelw1two on Wednesday, July 11, 2012 (11:38:58)

Aloha Rory...
"a situation which then touches me somehow"... the well from which all aspiring bards drink... I have found the best of words from such sources... many here at the spring of gp... your particular work brings to me the immediate... having watched the waning of many a better man to the humbling reality of dying flesh... however, many of the internal thoughts within our works do bleed of our own experiences, our own fears, our own morbid dreams... One would think that the celebration of life would be to revel in the happiness of the earthly body... the possibility of fellowship, friendship, and humble sharing... these seem such impossibilities within the boundarys of these times and the current situation in the US... should the progeny of these current time aristocrats experience just a touch of what you describe in your comments... a smidge of humanity... perhaps things would change for the positive... glum this thought though... when these minions fear only the smudge of bad press, and not what 'they' are really due... "friends who gradually come less and less often"... so too truth, when the game is one of the sopping of half-pennies from the masses of those who are mired under the oppressive nature of the human condition... what is experienced through a good read... and what is experienced through a living condition... can evoke such similar patterns of thought... Thanks again for your words... and I am happy to learn that your essence is whole and fluorishing... all of the best from this life, to you, and all of your relations... Michael.


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okay this is just simply amazing. i can't even find words to say how superb this poem is so I won't even try. I especially love the last verse. powerful write!

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Tuesday, July 10, 2012 (19:09:47)

Thank you so much, Bonnie. Your encouragement means a lot!


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A brilliant capture of mood and some wise words, well said!
My fav in the forum, too.

fond regards,
D.

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Tuesday, July 10, 2012 (22:33:01)

Thanks Deepali, and I acknowledge with gratitude your help in improving S3L3.


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Rory..this speaks loudly to me, both in craft and in content. It makes me think of great men like Ronald Reagan and Christopher Hitchens..intellectual giants who succumbed to illness. Reagan, who was always so personable and sharp, sunk into the dark void of Alzheimers. And Mr. Hitchens, who was a brilliant and prolific writer (and an avowed atheist) was taken by cancer. When they were both in their last days, I wondered about some things..Reagan was a man of faith. I wonder if, in his rare lucid moments, he ever questioned it. And conversely, I wonder if Mr. Hitchens ever considered crying out to God. Either way..you have captured something big in this poem. It's great.

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, July 11, 2012 (17:51:39)

We all go one way or another, I guess. I hope most of us ask questions about our lives. My father had Alzheimers in his last few years. He was a highly extroverted man with a fine mind, popular with many, not unlike the politician I referred to in my answer to Michael. He was also an atheist and his condition cut him like a barb before he sank too deep into it - perhaps he also cried out, as it were. My view is that the wise among us gain some insight into the human condition towards our end.


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dear Ozy - I read your explanation of what might have somehow prompted Only the best can reach inside like this and find words that say so much. Wonderful!
Sandy

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, July 11, 2012 (17:52:20)

Dear Sandy, I am most appreciative of your kind words!


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Oh My what a powerful poem. Loved the iambic pentameter strength of it. It feels so finely crafted. Thanks for this sharing. Warm Wishes, Tasha

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Wednesday, July 11, 2012 (23:05:07)

Your input is much appreciated, Tasha!


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How so touchy and strongly moving the piece gleam of.
The words best fit their places in each line and the rhymes easily fall into place with each nerve-pull leaving the reader with that feeling of pleasurable pain.

I can always feel a touch of mastery in your piece, Rory.
Nice one

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Thursday, July 12, 2012 (19:42:03)

Nicely expressed, Ossy!

I like your new avatar!


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G'day Rory...
You've done yourself proud with this poem Rory. The meter makes it wonderful to recite.
Regards
Lindsay

Re: Palliative (Score: 1 ) by Ozymandias on Friday, July 13, 2012 (02:22:29)

I appreciate your comment, Lindsay. I guess it's one that would lend itself to performance.


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