When The Polymath is at Peace

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Something about the poem holds my attention and pulls me from beginning to end. Except, a couple things seem to block that flow: "parturition" is very distracting and detracting from the poem; 3rd stanza"That fall.." is confusing. To what does it refer? summer sweat? "fall" requires a plural subject. There are several plural nouns is 1st stanza. Does it refer to them? Which? These take the reader's attention on a tangent away from the message of the poem. I hope this is helpful.

• Something about the by Lyla on Friday, January 23
  

I, Personally, love the title! I will have to look up the word, yes, but I like checking words and learning new ones. I find this poem a challenge, and a break from the usual.
I do not think it would be too much to ask to just put a comma after the phrase "That fall" That fall,", or even: "That fall, as slaves, to your hands" does help to explain everything you are trying to do. And the play on the words, becomes clearer, and very nice. Thank you, I appreciate your challenge, and am going to check out your other work!

• I, Personally, love by Lyla on Saturday, January 24
  

wow those words are so elegant and beautiful.