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Poems - Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet)

Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet)

by wolfinwindow

Could I compare you to a summer day,
With breezes flowing gently over me;
Or to a summer evening in a way;
With fragrance soft and coolness follows thee,
Or to a simple flower on that day,
Whose perfect petals cause the gentle breeze;
That I would pluck and hand to thee, my fey,
That you might carry back into the trees;
A perfect summer day that is you love,
Oh cover me in petals won't you please,
Surrounded in magic from up above,
My fey come to me on the summer breeze;
Oh my summer day; won't you stay awhile,
Yes, my summer day; stay and make me smile.

This is a tribute to William Shakespeare's sonnet, "Shall I Compare Thee To A Summer's Day"

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by maryanns on Tuesday, February 23, 2010 (13:34:05)

So beautiful and uplifting, your lovely sonnet written with such delicate care and old world charm. This was a joy to read, Mary Ann

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by unknownmover! on Tuesday, February 23, 2010 (17:25:51)

good write my friend..very good stuff!!very deep very good!

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by Ozymandias on Tuesday, February 23, 2010 (21:59:21)

The metre breaks down in a few places, but a sonnet is a difficult form to master and this is a good effort as such, with some lovely images and an attractive theme flowing through it.

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by butterflyzrfree on Wednesday, February 24, 2010 (01:03:41)

Great sonnet, but how much is lifted from Shakespeare?

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by wolfinwindow on Wednesday, February 24, 2010 (05:47:49)

The first line is a twist on a Shakespeareian sonnet, I wanted to put in the old world twist and it was the best way.

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by Zbird on Wednesday, February 24, 2010 (11:03:07)

great write. great tribute to Mr. Shakespeare and to butterblyz - only one line from William's poem was used, but also rewritten. you should have checked out the poem before commenting. in music it is legal to use up to 8 bars of any score and it is not considered plagiarism. not sure how it is in poetry but this is not a stolen poem.

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Re: Fey Upon The Breeze (a sonnet) (Score: 1 )
by variable58 on Wednesday, March 03, 2010 (09:47:28)

real pretty

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