Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light

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Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Monday, March 08, 2010 (12:55:27)

Thanks, Joan, it's always a great feeling to know that I've made someone smile and they enjoyed my little ditty. Funny thing how these ideas sneak up on you and grab you. Thanks, my friend. -- j.


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Brilliant writing...a wonderful journey....Homer would proud of the refrence....You may be a tad fickle but you write well...reminds me of a Bogart monologue....great work poet

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Monday, March 08, 2010 (12:51:15)

Well, Ron, apparently my "fickleness" hasn't affected my brilliant writing ability, which is a good thing -- just as your political ignorance has not affected your brilliant writing either . In all honesty, I appreciate you coming by to read and I am really glad you enjoyed it. Two poems in the last week, I'm hoping that it will keep flowing and this writer's block I've had this year will slowly fade away. Thank you, my friend. -- j.


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You are incorrigible. Great write.

TB

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:41:35)

My friend, we all have to be good at something in the world! Thanks for coming by to read and comment, I greatly appreciate it. I hope you are doing well. -- j.


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Been there, shoe on the other foot. Enough said my friend, absolutely passionately loved this. I'm raising a glass to the master. Cheers, Mary Ann

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:42:55)

Hey Mary Ann, thank you so much for your thoughts. I really appreciate you coming by to read, it feels good to have some new work for you to read as I always so greatly appreciate your feedback. I raise my glass back to you in a "Salut!" to the finest poet I know... -- j.


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okay. J. HAHA. This made me think of Monty python humor, because I know your hate for menthol. Well done, I certainly enjoyed it. =)

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:45:14)

Aha, someone sees my overwhelming charm! Life has meaning, yay! Lil, thanks for stopping the argument with that man banging the coconuts together over there (Where did he get them? Coconuts are not indiginous to England!) to come by for a read and your thoughts. I am really glad you enjoyed it. I'm long over-due for going by to check out your newer work, but I'll get to this within the next few days. Always a pleasure to hear from you, my dear beautiful friend. Don't worry, if it was you with the menthol I'd probably make an exception. -- j.


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You're Good ...

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:46:49)

True, Libby, but you're great. -- j.


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Good stuff, JP. Haha! 'the fire came alive as if she summoned it from her beauty'; love that line.

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:49:50)

Hello, dear friend, it is good to hear from you. I hope you are doing very groovy. I am glad you enjoyed it, hopefully my muse (I had to get a rental muse as mine ran away with my charm) will stick around for awhile and I can put out some new great work within the next month or so as well. I'm always appreciative of your thoughts. -- j.


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They can still smoke in bars where you are ? This is a great write, my short attention span loved this Narrative and craves more. The reference to filter-less cigarettes almost a homage to Vargas and his " painted " ladies. Poems are much cooler with Merle Haggard references in them.

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:53:30)

Tennessee State Law on smoking in bars is that as long as the establishment does not allow anyone in that is under the age of 21 then you are allowed to smoke in a bar. It's fortunate that my bar does not allow anyone under the age of 21 mainly for this reason (I think a bar without being able to smoke with your beer is like a man running a marathon with one leg -- it just doesn't make sense). If they ever tried to ban cigarettes from my bar we'd all probably still do it anyway (we're a very 'private' pub). I didn't give alot of thought to Vargas, but I can see the comparison. I also agree about the Merle reference -- isn't life in general better with his music, style, and contribution to society from his greatness? Thanks for coming by and for your thoughts, my friend. -- j.


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Hey JP..great narrative piece. The title drew me in, and I knew I would have the pleasure of reading your unique brand of Americana. Long poems are difficult for me, but yours always grab my attention and hold on until the end.

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Tuesday, March 09, 2010 (15:58:42)

Hi Hugh, thank you so much for your thoughts and taking the time to read and comment. I think we all have a unique voice and a good story (or fifty if we're poets) to tell the world. I'm glad that you enjoyed this piece. I'm hoping my cheating muse will serve me well for awhile so I can continue to contribute some ditties to the site without having to take such a long period between pieces. Anymore, I do well to write 2-3 pieces in any given month. -- j.


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Great Odyssey reference and a truly excellent title. Very nice poem overall. Y'all did good!

This poem's curves has one having to slow down for the dead man's curves in your brain. Fighting a weak bladder and the allure of a woman smoking a unfiltered Pall Mall even though she preferred a menthol, (plain nasty) all the time questioning your actions, what a ride. Is this poem about weak bladders and fine beer or fighting the demon? BWP... James... It is good to see the master at work...

All the local bars in my neighborhood have basically vanished. Given way to sports bars. And smoking's been banned. Yep, there was nothing like walking by an old style tavern catching the odor of stale smoke and spilled beer. Nowadays there's so many TV's on and airport decibel level music thumping in the background - I feel like I'm autistic. Thanks for the trip to the bar. I can see the lipstick on her cigarette ~

Poem noir.......a brilliant poem again JP.......just loved it.
Cheers.........Harry

Ahhhhh....J.P. J.P.!! What fun to read this poem! You pied-pipered a smile from my lips.....even as I desperately tried to cling to my lovely, and in danger of becoming a personal friend, melancholia.
Then....I heard a faintly familiar sound...couldn't put my finger on it the first time...but on the second one ...I remembered... HA!...it was my giggler! You had caused my on hiatus giggler to erupt...and then...my giggler caused a jiggler...or...well..TWO jigglers to be more exact! So...there I was...giggling and jiggling and wiggling about in my computer chair for the first time in a long time and it just felt sooo darned GOOD to be giggling and jiggling and wiggling again! I mean...I HAVE giggled lately...but not to the jiggling point..and certainly NOT into the wiggling arena! And I have jiggled...without a giggle to induce it...more and more easily done as the years go by! AND...I can even say I have wiggled lately...but without the giggle to cause the jiggle to produce the wiggle! Soooo dear Jason....I thank you for coming straight from Hamlen to lure my sense of fun back up to the surface!
Seriously, it is really nice to read you once again..it's been too long as I've always been an admirer of your work. Wishing lots of inspirational fodder to fly your way...but I know it won't be long. A 10 and a heart for this one, Jason.

I like to read a poem in which the author has a little laugh against himself! You've done well with this.

Notice how I can't leave your site: addictive. Not many people have this self deprecating quality: its very appealing: draws me in. BTWThe knights templar did not have regalia: quite simple attire really I think. Are you trying to corner the market for unrequitted love? I have one of those on my site as well. Great write.

Re: Nothing Says Love Like A Gal With A Pall Mall In The Bar Light (Score: 1 ) by JPerry1980 on Monday, August 16, 2010 (14:41:11)

Dahlia:

You are more than welcome to bring your shampoo and a bag of clothes over here to my site and set up permanent residence with me, I don't mind at all. I do enjoy reading your feedback (after this, I'm going to skip on over to your page and occupy myself for the rest of the afternoon here at work in reading your poems, just stock your page with some Milwaukee's Best for me).

I have always approved of the phrase: "Write what you know." As a native of eastern Tennessee and a "cultured redneck" I know bars very well -- this is why they so often appear in my work (along with drinking beer, smoking, listening to old Outlaw music, the type of thing). Sometimes I intentionally attempt to move into a different type of writing (attempting to step into the shoes of another character) but more often than not I find myself falling back on the things I know from life experiences.

What's wrong with having a healthy self-deprecating quality? I am who I am -- warts and all. I can be an ass sometimes and I sometimes (sometimes) can manage to be a true gentleman. We all have our good and bad inside. The only thing I try to assure myself of is to always be honest to myself and to others around me -- not attempt to put up a facade of being something I'm not.

As far as the Knights Templar -- you're probably right, for some reason I often get them confused with the Teutonic Knights (the white background with red cross). Thanks, again...

j.p.


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