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Commuter

by strongman

As soon as Rick is done with work,
he goes from gentleman to jerk.
On his way to the subway trains,
he pisses and moans and complains
“Who are these people around me?”
“Have they no other place to be?”

Although his work days go so well,
his commutes home are wicked hell.
When he gets home he’s in no mood,
for love, affection and warm food.
His wife sees how low Rick has sunk,
she eats alone as he gets drunk





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Re: Commuter (Score: 1 )
by maryanns on Monday, May 10, 2010 (11:11:20)
Ahhh...
such a sad commentary
on life in the fast lane.
Very well written...
me thinks Rick needs
an attitude adjustment.
Cheers, Mary Ann

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    Re: Commuter (Score: 1 )
    by strongman on Monday, May 10, 2010 (20:48:32)
    you certainly got the flavor of the poem and of Rick...thanks so much.

    | Parent

Re: Commuter (Score: 1 )
by thewholesoul on Tuesday, July 13, 2010 (17:21:08)
i found that funny, but sometimes brute reaklity can do that. very well depicted strongman - the character description was spot on for many folk i would imagine. best wishes

conor

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    Re: Commuter (Score: 1 )
    by strongman on Monday, July 19, 2010 (11:31:08)
    Thanks Conor! Your comments mean a lot to me. I really need to spend more time visiting the site!!!!

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