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Poems - A Red Balloon
| | A Red Balloonby bigbadwolf
I remember that day in the summer
They had posted signs up all over town
The circus was coming, we were to be amazed
Animals of all shapes, big and little clowns
It seemed as though the whole town showed
For the only world existed under the tent that day
As children, we looked on in sheer delight
Memories that we could carry away
But what my sister and I valued most
Was a single red balloon each of us got
Wrapping mine around my hand
We were too young to know about knots
Out into the evening breeze we were carried
My sister's hand could no longer hold the string
Off into the distance the red dot climbed
Watching for a few more seconds and then nothing
I gave my sister my red balloon to share
As she sat on our fathers shoulders
I reached up to hold her little hand
I love my little sister, she would not float away
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by thewholesoul on Tuesday, June 29, 2010 (13:35:46) |
very well written as always. the last kind was very curious, could you explain it a little further for me - the part were she wouldnt float around. thanks and best wishes
conor
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Tuesday, June 29, 2010 (15:16:08) |
Thank you Conor. It was just a slip of the pen.After losing one red balloon, it was a big brother's way of holding onto his sister so she did not float away. It was his way of protecting her in his eyes.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by thewholesoul on Tuesday, June 29, 2010 (15:17:50) |
ah yes, i see now. thanks mate.
all the best
conor
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by Jayelle on Tuesday, June 29, 2010 (18:37:33) |
Oh what a sweet poem! I love the natural protectiveness shown for the little sister AND the generosity in sharing your balloon! Perhaps to ward of an outburst of tears? Great scene depicted! J.
(PS just a nitpick..if you are the older "bigger" sibling, wouldn't you reach down for her hand rather than up? Just curious)
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (05:46:56) |
You were right about the poem, now I have changed a line to make it read better.Thank you for bringing this to my attention Jayelle.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by ken2shoes on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (08:33:25) |
lovely, lovely little poem. Heard about you from Joan, sure glad I stopped by. Plan to read lots more. I love the lyricism and the love in this. Time to stop gushing, check off the Heart and post the 10.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (09:02:25) |
Thank you ken2shoes. And thank you Joan.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by WordLover on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (18:54:07) |
awww, you paint a lovely picture of a bright summer day with the warm wind blowing! Great story (within a poem) that you've penned here - love your ending - so sweet.
Sandy
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (18:56:23) |
Thank you Sandy.Have you read "blackberry patch"?
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by maryanns on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (19:25:23) |
Such a wonderful trip back to county fairs and traveling carnevals... ah, the sweetness of your childhood memory rivals cotton candy at the fair. Cheers, Mary Ann
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Wednesday, June 30, 2010 (19:54:36) |
Thank you Maryanns for bringing back some wonderful childhood memories.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by jean on Thursday, July 01, 2010 (13:23:43) |
lovely poem very touching
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Thursday, July 01, 2010 (19:17:54) |
Thank you.
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by MusicMaestro13 on Thursday, July 01, 2010 (14:13:43) |
Having two younger sisters myself, I loved your take on the Big Brother mindset. It struck home for me... Really really enjoyed this, friend. Quite deserving of the 10 and the heart. Well composed, Wolf!
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Re: A Red Balloon
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by bigbadwolf on Thursday, July 01, 2010 (19:18:44) |
Thank you very much.
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