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Niki,

that's so Poetic,
that you paint pictures with
the words of pain and suffering emotions.
I definitely enjoyed reading it.

Especially,
"he leaves me scrambled-
like eggs in frying in a pan.
he leaves me empty-
like a hollow pop can.
he leaves me here;
where soothing winds dont play-
with nothing but pain
to blow another day.

he leaves me broken-
with reflections that bleed;
where solace cant be spoken,
and the demons breed.
he leaves me here,
with no words say,
he leaves me-
struggling with the night and day."

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Monday, August 09, 2010 (13:44:21)

ty, d -
your kind words do warm my
heart...your a gem and a dear friend as well


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wow Niki-lita - such raw poetic agony - displayed for us all to see - well written portrait -love your title - it caught my eye. (typo = "amidst") i hate it when my fingres jpum ahead to soon...thanks for a great read. =P

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Monday, August 09, 2010 (14:52:28)

good eye my friend... Thank you I will fix it soon.
and thank you so much for your comment,and that wickedly cool nickname
be well and peace ta ya
niki-lita


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you are good...smooth and intoxicating all the way through....undeniable talent and truth here..q

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (01:59:51)

thank you q.j. wow really thats one heck of a
compliment....
thanks again


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Honey I felt every word of this
What a sad write
may the snuggly feeling of a thousand pillows come your way

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (02:02:39)

awwww thanks shazz its good to
see your smiling toes again
and oh thank you for the pillows
they are pretty snuggly


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brilliant write niki, i love this piece, a fave

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:25:25)

thank you, my friend
it is always a pleasure having you here
be well...


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Wow Niki this is an incredible write. The emotion truly jumps out at the reader. This is a fav for me my friend... really well written.


Take care of yourself....
DiSfRaZada

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:32:10)

wow, dr.. Your kindness is flattering...
thank you for your company and comment, both
are perpetually warming...


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This is an incredible piece of poetry. I love it.

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:34:00)

ooooh ty pinky pinkster, really it is such a pleasure
having you here.


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"shards of blue" very poetic my dear. much enjoyed your poem too.

just curious however in L2 is there meant to be two 'in's?

take good care
best wishes
conor

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (16:42:22)

ty conor, and no there is suppose to be only one
I will fix that... thank you again for stpping by


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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (16:43:14)

ty conor, and no there is suppose to be only one
I will fix that... thank you again for stpping by


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Powerful write with good expression. Rhyme is used well, not overdone.

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Wednesday, August 11, 2010 (10:56:20)

hey, thank you ozy,very nice that you stopped by with such
a pleasing comment happy to have you here.
be well and peace to ya
niki


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Oh wow. That is amazing! Love the poetic beauty, with haunting sadness....I truly hope you arnt feeling this way my friend but if so...BIG HUGS FOR YOU!!!!!! -GLOMPS- I LOVE flying hugs!

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Wednesday, August 11, 2010 (10:59:16)

wow! thank you!so much.. your words are kind
presence is pleasing.
be well and peace to ya
niki


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A peek into a tragedy...a slice of empty soul,
'tis but the truth of bleeding love,
that leaves a jagged hole!

So deeply moving, so well phrased, so penetrating...made me shiver at the feel of the desperation.

Nicely written, and wonderful awareness!

More please...

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:28:01)

ty so much blue, good to see ya on my page
will be raiding yours soon my freind..


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You make agony seem something to strive for..

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:29:19)

ty bd so happy to have ya here


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Nice rhyme, good flow, powerfull expressions. A fine write.

Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 ) by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:30:23)

ty so much raw, I am so haPPY TO HAVE YA HERE


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