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shards of blue

by twistedmistress

he leaves me scrambled-
like eggs frying in a pan.
he leaves me empty-
like a hollow pop can.
he leaves me here;
where soothing winds dont play-
with nothing but pain
to blow another day.

he leaves me broken-
with reflections that bleed;
where solace cant be spoken,
and the demons breed.
he leaves me here,
with no words say,
he leaves me-
struggling with the night and day.

abandoned here with nothing but a ring,
my heart turns from gold to brass.
he left me with nothin but the sting-
of this bed full of broken glass.

tainted from the grip of his death,
my desolate souls is askew.
for me agony is all i have left,
amidst these shards of blue.





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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Daniel on Monday, August 09, 2010 (13:38:41)
Niki,

that's so Poetic,
that you paint pictures with
the words of pain and suffering emotions.
I definitely enjoyed reading it.

Especially,
"he leaves me scrambled-
like eggs in frying in a pan.
he leaves me empty-
like a hollow pop can.
he leaves me here;
where soothing winds dont play-
with nothing but pain
to blow another day.

he leaves me broken-
with reflections that bleed;
where solace cant be spoken,
and the demons breed.
he leaves me here,
with no words say,
he leaves me-
struggling with the night and day."

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Monday, August 09, 2010 (13:44:21)
    ty, d -
    your kind words do warm my
    heart...your a gem and a dear friend as well

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by jonniblaze on Monday, August 09, 2010 (14:37:45)
wow Niki-lita - such raw poetic agony - displayed for us all to see - well written portrait -love your title - it caught my eye. (typo = "amidst") i hate it when my fingres jpum ahead to soon...thanks for a great read. =P

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Monday, August 09, 2010 (14:52:28)
    good eye my friend... Thank you I will fix it soon.
    and thank you so much for your comment,and that wickedly cool nickname
    be well and peace ta ya
    niki-lita Wink

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by questionajourney on Monday, August 09, 2010 (18:17:47)
you are good...smooth and intoxicating all the way through....undeniable talent and truth here..q

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (01:59:51)
    thank you q.j. wow really thats one heck of a
    compliment....
    thanks again

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by shazza on Monday, August 09, 2010 (18:55:10)
Honey I felt every word of this
What a sad write
may the snuggly feeling of a thousand pillows come your way

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (02:02:39)
    awwww thanks shazz its good to
    see your smiling toes again Very Happy
    and oh thank you for the pillows
    they are pretty snuggly

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Dreaming-Demon on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (10:06:57)
brilliant write niki, i love this piece, a fave

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:25:25)
    thank you, my friend
    it is always a pleasure having you here
    be well...

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Disfrazada on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (10:32:38)
Wow Niki this is an incredible write. The emotion truly jumps out at the reader. This is a fav for me my friend... really well written.


Take care of yourself....
DiSfRaZada

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:32:10)
    wow, dr.. Your kindness is flattering...
    thank you for your company and comment, both
    are perpetually warming...

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by PinkNeonFlavor on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:04:30)
This is an incredible piece of poetry. I love it.

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (11:34:00)
    ooooh ty pinky pinkster, really it is such a pleasure
    having you here.

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by thewholesoul on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (16:09:15)
"shards of blue" very poetic my dear. much enjoyed your poem too.

just curious however in L2 is there meant to be two 'in's?

take good care
best wishes
conor

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (16:42:22)
    ty conor, and no there is suppose to be only one Laughing
    I will fix that... thank you again for stpping by

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (16:43:14)
    ty conor, and no there is suppose to be only one Laughing
    I will fix that... thank you again for stpping by

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Ozymandias on Tuesday, August 10, 2010 (23:14:00)
Powerful write with good expression. Rhyme is used well, not overdone.

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Wednesday, August 11, 2010 (10:56:20)
    hey, thank you ozy,very nice that you stopped by with such
    a pleasing comment happy to have you here.
    be well and peace to ya
    niki

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Superchick on Wednesday, August 11, 2010 (03:51:26)
Oh wow. That is amazing! Love the poetic beauty, with haunting sadness....I truly hope you arnt feeling this way my friend but if so...BIG HUGS FOR YOU!!!!!! -GLOMPS- I LOVE flying hugs!

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Wednesday, August 11, 2010 (10:59:16)
    wow! thank you!so much.. your words are kind
    presence is pleasing.
    be well and peace to ya
    niki

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by Bluesman on Friday, August 13, 2010 (14:28:12)
A peek into a tragedy...a slice of empty soul,
'tis but the truth of bleeding love,
that leaves a jagged hole!

So deeply moving, so well phrased, so penetrating...made me shiver at the feel of the desperation.

Nicely written, and wonderful awareness!

More please...

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:28:01)
    ty so much blue, good to see ya on my page
    will be raiding yours soon my freind..

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by blackdahlia on Saturday, August 14, 2010 (19:01:38)
You make agony seem something to strive for..

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:29:19)
    ty bd so happy to have ya here

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Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
by raw on Wednesday, August 25, 2010 (15:04:08)
Nice rhyme, good flow, powerfull expressions. A fine write.

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    Re: shards of blue (Score: 1 )
    by twistedmistress on Friday, August 27, 2010 (20:30:23)
    ty so much raw, I am so haPPY TO HAVE YA HERE

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