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Terrific mastery of metaphor and imagery! Deserves the highest praise.

Keep up this fine writing, Mysteri!

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Friday, December 31, 2010 (23:03:36)

This is indeed high praise coming from you, Ozy! I am truly humbled.

Mysteri


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A fine working of the word in this powerful poem M.
Cheers...Harry

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Saturday, January 01, 2011 (03:07:41)

Thank you, Harry. Coming from you, this is a great compliment. I have been very lucky with this poem!

Mysteri


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great write.loved every lines of it.

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Saturday, January 01, 2011 (19:56:02)

Thank you, Anil. Your comment is much appreciated.

Mysteri


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Welcome back to GP, this is a great write. I like that last line particularly. Keep up the good work!

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Saturday, January 01, 2011 (23:50:16)

Thanks for your kind comments and welcome. I really appreciate it. M.


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Well-well-well I waited for this and did not see it posted until last week, sorry I did not get back sooner. The title made me think I need some of those pills and I was surprised with the direction you took me. I read this several times. Read it slow, I read it slow again. Then I read it taking it apart word by word and line by line. Then I read it in the writers voice, as if it was being spoken from the depths of your heart at an open mike, you wowed me.

I, the word I, points to ones self, well most of the time and I think it can be over used. In this poem the use of the word at the start makes one think, the self, then later in the poem it seems to change according to the way it is read, it can sound as if ( I ) is a group of people talking to someone that has run for King in an election and won. Then ( I ) can be still speaking of ones self. I, myself I like this both ways (over easy or sunny side up).

a seed sown in fertile ground, then the use of, fragile mind,

Can mean ones own mind or a group of peoples mind. It was in the third stanza I seen the change in the poem.

My question to you is, did you mean to write the poem, speaking two languages of thought?

I am so very glad to see you posting again. Don't make me wait so long for the next one... BWP... James... Have a few of these today and ...

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Monday, January 17, 2011 (03:07:35)

James, it's good to hear from you again, too.

Well, I think you read more into this poem than I intended! It was something that came from the heart, a memory that seemed to have gone, but is deeply buried and overwhelms me in dreams. It was not a romantic alliance.

It is the power of dreams that is amazing, often - out of conscious control - one is taken places whether one likes them or not.

Take care. Thanks for the smiles - here are some for you!




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Mysteri, your poem reads like a quaint little cartoon village of thought and patterned well designed movement and colour/s.

induce

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Saturday, June 11, 2011 (19:23:24)

Thank you for your very interesting comment, Andye. Sorry I've not replied earlier - was a little ill for a while. Thanks again. Mysteri.


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You thrill me.

Re: Memory Pills (Score: 1 ) by Mysteri on Saturday, June 11, 2011 (19:24:00)

Thank you, Chris! Mysteri


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