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Poems - We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine


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We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine

by tommyjacksprat

ladies of the night
are dressed in finest lace
while hiding in the shadows
where they never leave a trace
on barren - broken - bastard streets
these ladies have no face
with tarnished tassels in their hair
they stand like statues there and stare

the ladies of the night
now lean in darkened doorways while
they sip selected wine
and watch two lovers writhe entwined
upon the floor where bleeding whores
are losing life from open sores
where punctured veins and death remains
inside a fantasy that reigns
with bitter dreams of better things
that lost tomorrows never bring

now lovers covered - soiled and stained
with bursting leaks from wounded veins
where needles of inclusion
can create and make illusion
last beyond the degradation
as they stride in "sharp" persuasion
unto death of one whole nation
in complete discreet oblation

can't find a lot of pity
in a dark and dirty city
as the waste is placed in alleyways
and vagrants void themselves
on steamin' streets at dawn
while new commuters stop to yawn
as night concerns now fade to gone

all is lost at higher cost
inside a pride that has been tossed
onto the gutter -
where machismo men just shudder
as they lose their life-time rudder
leaving all directions and erections
on the street's abstract inflections
just before they lose connection
with their soul

forgetting obligations
where unique configurations
seem to supplement and compliment
the pain
the mutual - conceptual - PAIN

who is the dreamer and who owns the dream?
who is the screamer in the scream?
it's you and I dear friend of mine
we dream the dream and scream the scream
as part of Eden's Garden Scene
but we don't ever cross the line
cause we ain't got that kind-a shine

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Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
by Essex68 on Tuesday, April 05, 2011 (03:52:08)
This is brilliant. great flow and wording. I must read some more of your work. Nice one

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    Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
    by tommyjacksprat on Tuesday, April 05, 2011 (05:12:55)
    Hi Essex68. Thank you for the read and generous
    words. If you want to read my stuff search for easyeverett
    which is my old handle but due to several computer related
    problems I can't post or review from my old name but you
    can rummage through my portfolio. I appreciate the praise.
    Glad you found it a worthy post. easy

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Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
by fogglethorpe on Tuesday, April 05, 2011 (21:34:33)
Wow. This is a unique combination of iambic meter, free verse, and rhyme. There is a musical intensity. Full of unapologetic insights and impressive wordplay. I mean it when I say that you are without a doubt one of the most talented poets at GP.

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    Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
    by tommyjacksprat on Tuesday, April 05, 2011 (23:35:18)
    Coming from you whom I have admired since I first came to this site and kind of fuddled around for awhile. I saw your poetics as very solid and mature in workshop. You never insulted anyone but when comment were made you ofen used a review to teach the reviewer, and, I might add, with good reason. So your opinion of me makes me very proud Hugh. tom

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Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
by Ozymandias on Wednesday, April 06, 2011 (01:42:30)
Excellent work! I love the way you use those rhymes.

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    Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
    by tommyjacksprat on Wednesday, April 06, 2011 (07:47:00)
    Ozy, are those your tits? LOL Thanks my bro most
    honored Oz. easy

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      Re: We Ain't Got That Kind-a Shine (Score: 1 )
      by Ozymandias on Wednesday, April 06, 2011 (18:53:02)
      I decided I needed a face transplant. I asked them to make me look like Marlon Brando. But things went horribly wrong.... Crying or Very sad

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