Corporate Radio

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The rhyming seems forced then loses structure. It's alright to change the scheme or structure throughout, however some indication with an implied rhyme or something of that nature helps. All radio seems corporate ( music-wise ), tell the reader something new. Even though Elvis Costello released " Radio Radio " in 1978 it still sends shock-waves through the industry and to the listener how he would dare to challenge the giant industry. Think about materials used in the radio station such as loops, magnetic tape, payola etc. The last stanza is probably the best but needs a little strengthening to make it more dynamic. Hope this helps you.

Re: Corporate Radio (Score: 1 ) by Wordvandal on Saturday, April 09, 2011 (01:55:12)

I think this is worth more than a four, Elvis Costello, bah...


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Re: Corporate Radio (Score: 1 ) by rondo on Saturday, April 09, 2011 (17:15:04)

thanks buddy....there is a trade off somtimes in structure for content...some go the other way and sacrafice content for structure.....nice you can see the difference...peace


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I agree there is a trade off - I like this point of view!


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