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Uncertainty

by maryanns

I lie in the slipstream of an uncertain dream;
my mind travels thousands of miles away
to another place and time that meant everything
and even more to me, in the passing days.

Thoughts play dirty tricks with my intelligence;
my head spins on an axis of unbearable pain
the nexus of which coincides with a ticking clock
telling me in so many ways, I was wrong.

The sky was pleasant then, pure summertime
when all the world was green, or so it seems.
Our hours passed in precious daydreams blessed
where orchids bloom beside an orange sea.

We traveled here and there, seeing all the sights
there ever were to see, from sea to sea to see…
we softly sank at twilight, our arms entwined alike
our skin immersed as one. Fond memories…

Here, beneath the span of spinning stars I reach
for more than just a lasting taste, your breath
of love breathed into me. For time was never ours
to ever spend or waste; I long for nothing less.





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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Daniel on Sunday, May 22, 2011 (02:04:45)
A Beautiful Poem
that looks like
a Dream.

"The sky was pleasant then, pure summertime
when all the world was green, or so it seems.
Our hours passed in precious daydreams blessed
where orchids bloom beside an orange sea.

We traveled here and there, seeing all the sights
there ever were to see, from sea to sea to see…
we softly sank at twilight, our arms entwined alike
our skin immersed as one. Fond memories…

Here, beneath the span of spinning stars I reach
for more than just a lasting taste, your breath
of love breathed into me. For time was never ours
to ever spend or waste; I long for nothing less."

I really enjoyed reading
your Poem. It showed a lot
of Emotions between Love
and Confused. Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile Smile

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:14:26)
    Thank you Daniel - your sweet comments
    and smiley faces always make me feel so good!
    You're like warm sunshine on a cloudy day
    the smell of honeysuckle on a breeze
    with just a hint of artist's paint
    beneath your fingernails...

    Oodles of smiles back at you, Mary Ann
    Very Happy Smile Very Happy Smile Very Happy Smile Very Happy Smile Very Happy Smile Very Happy

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Ilan on Sunday, May 22, 2011 (04:20:21)
Beautiful opening line and verse,
hypnotic in presentation.

From sea to sea to see, you're killing
me with your words and saving me
with your dreams

Wonderful poetry,

Kind rgs
Ilan

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:18:21)
    It just came out that way...
    so I looked at it and read it over
    and I thought - maybe it's ok,
    I could change it - but it's not a cliche
    and it makes perfect sense to me...

    Thank you so much, Ilan ...
    you always see right through me.

    Cheers, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by rondo on Sunday, May 22, 2011 (10:23:55)
your recollections seem to stabalize the title...nice piece MA

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:23:42)
    Ah, Ron... You are a true friend.
    through ups and downs and all arounds.
    when answers do evade.
    Your comments are so appreciated...
    Your good friend, Mary Ann Very Happy

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by FuchsiaFestival! on Sunday, May 22, 2011 (12:08:18)
Beautiful poetry that is accented through beautiful phrases such as 'we softly sank at twilight' Wink

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:25:54)
    Adversity and uncertainty may make for inspiration...
    thank you for seeing through the clouds. I love
    your sense of perception. Thanks so much, Sammi.
    Best wishes, Mary Ann Very Happy

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by omegapaf on Monday, May 23, 2011 (03:04:11)
a wonderful love poem my friend....stars always fall, or explode in to a mess - i hate ticking clocks - paul.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:38:01)
    If I had a Coo-koo clock I'd have to kill it (besides learning to spell it).
    My daughter has at least one... but then again she raises St. Bernard's ...
    I think she has developed a very high tolerance for chaos, both inside and out.

    Thanks my friend - By the way:

    "What do they call 5,000 lawyers at the bottom of the ocean?"
    A good start....

    Perhaps you should file a motion...
    "Piling on is not considered good form."

    Either way, good luck, my friend - I'm with you all the way!
    Best wishes, Mary Ann

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      Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
      by omegapaf on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:50:29)
      only 5000?....i think there will be a few more wearing concrete boots ( as they used to say in old jimmy cagney ganster movies ) before this case is over - any time my friend....i believe i owe you a message, but i've gale force winds today, and been trying to tie my garage roof down with string.....i know....i know, but i can't go up on the roof. there are 80mph gusts - as hunter s. thompsons lawyer said in " fear and loathing in las vegas " , " i'll send a telegram explaining my position............sounds like a good idea if you have sh*t for brains " ha ha. - paul and stinky.

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        Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
        by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:21:12)
        Damn it - just stay inside and talk to me, silly poet. You are not a high-plains roofer, at least not in all the books I've read.

        Keep 'yer jammies on 'an ride 'er out till its safe... !!

        Maybe later, when it settles down a bit, my current recommendation would be to use chicken wire, plastic wire ties and duct-tape (like me). Although many neighborhoods around here are still utilizing "blue-tarp-special" roofing systems. That's from 2007, dearie; no more no less.

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by wordtangle on Monday, May 23, 2011 (08:12:48)
'I lie in the slipstream of an uncertain dream'

This line is so very satisfying, and oh so very true.


and

'Here, beneath the span of spinning stars I reach
for more than just a lasting taste'

it flows so well - cinematic, great flowing words

Thanks

Very Happy

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (14:48:05)
    I loved both when they came to me... thank you so much for mentioning them. I don't have the talent to ooze out a whole poem, generally just a phrase here and there... then it's like feeling my way to puzzle pieces strewn about somewhere. I know everybody does it differently... that's why poetry is such a challenge and also so much fun. Thanks again, Paul; really appreciated. Cheers, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Iridium on Monday, May 23, 2011 (12:06:07)
This has such a nice flow and rhythym. The imagery is worthy of Wordsworth, which is difficult because there have been so many love and nature poems written. This has a subtlty that I really love. Well done, dear poet.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:07:27)
    Thank you so much for your thoughtful comments. To say you made my day would be a vast understatement (as well as a cliche) - I really do mean it, though. I believe we all try to write unique, but I agree we are awash in the theme of love and nature ... I'm so glad you felt a somewhat different perspective here. Very best wishes, Mary Ann

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      Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
      by Iridium on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:09:51)
      Made your day?You made mine with this poem.

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        Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
        by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:24:11)
        Tee-hee, what time is it there...?

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          Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
          by Iridium on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:28:40)
          2 thirty in the afternoon, 90 miles north of Chicago.

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            Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
            by maryanns on Monday, May 23, 2011 (16:02:52)
            A-ha - high and dry, I hope? I am in the oft times cloudy Pacific Northwest, about 160 miles west-southwest of Seattle. Isn't it neat how this friendly website brings us all together. Very Happy Very Happy

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Essex68 on Monday, May 23, 2011 (15:37:29)
I adore this piece maryanns, some beautifully constructed lines.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (11:58:49)
    Thank you so much, Wayne. I love it when I can get deep into a poem and stay true to the intent - and I'm so glad you enjoyed it.

    Thanks again, my friend. Mary Ann Very Happy

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Arsaces on Monday, May 23, 2011 (16:57:35)
A very beautiful love poem. Arsaces

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:01:42)
    Thank you, my friend - your comments are deeply appreciated, from my heart, no less... Very best wishes, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by fogglethorpe on Monday, May 23, 2011 (18:26:53)
Love your style..you flirt with blank verse, but never quite commit. It lends an urgency to your verse. The last stanza shines..wonderful.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:15:06)
    I always learn so much from your comments, and believe me...
    I know I have much to learn. I love the feeling of swinging into this style, simply wish it might happen more often. Thank you for sharing your expertise, Hugh; very greatly appreciated. Cheers, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Aparna on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (08:29:42)
Loved the way this poem just sways and you can't stop till your done reading it!
Regards
Aparna

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:20:29)
    Wooo... Thank you so much, Aparna! I love when someone finds word-rhythm in a poem, not easy to achieve (at least for me). I truly appreciate your kindness. Peace, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by BrokenWordsPoet on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (08:54:01)
To wrap my mind around, drawn to every line, I feel my own uncertainty and that is what good poetry should do. Form a connection. BWP... James... Peace... Mary Ann...

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:27:34)
    Love it - "wrap my mind around, drawn to every line" ... your comments fit the mood of the poem so perfectly, James. Again I'm blessed by your understanding comments, even amid uncertainty.

    Things are improving... and thanks again my friend.
    Cheers, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by MoZark on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (09:46:35)
I like to say “Have a grand tomorrow” but with this poem you’ve made today a grand place to be… Jack

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:31:05)
    Thank you, Jack - what a wonderful lift. The skies are sunny out, I must not lose track of time this morning... outside is where I'll be, shortly! I hope you are high and dry, and by all means safe, my friend. Best wishes, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by doubt41 on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (10:17:36)
amazing, how are you my friend? I really liked this.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:36:48)
    Thank you so much ... I am fine and dandy this morning. I woke up early to a sunshiny day here, hasn't been a regular thing so far this season. I believe I'll slip outside in a few minutes and try to get my share of vitamin D out of it. I hope all is well there, too...
    Thanks again, so appreciated. Take care, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by misty678 on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (10:36:56)
Simply beautiful

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Tuesday, May 24, 2011 (12:39:27)
    Oh, Helen-Lee... thank you so much. I hope all is well where you are, so much bad weather everywhere... I believe we are just now finally experiencing spring. Very best wishes, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Bolekaja on Wednesday, May 25, 2011 (11:04:14)
Hi Maryann - I think it's fair to say that this poem like the consciousess you describe in the first line, has a 'slipstream' of its own. For me the poem resonates with a kind of dreamlike magnetism which draws the reader into a similar state as the one you were in when you wrote...great..I can realy identify
with the longing "for nothing less"...interesting that you describe the taste as 'just a lasting taste" rather than say a 'fleeting one' - this gives reason to stop and reflect- which to my mind is desirable...Thank you! - Colin.

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Wednesday, May 25, 2011 (13:58:33)
    Oh, I'm so pleased you were able to relate to this, Colin;
    basically a non-fiction piece of work...

    I've felt the fleeting taste of love
    that came and went, and I was fine
    but then I always wondered why
    the lasting kind seemed difficult to find...

    Probably just me... Very Happy Very Happy

    Thanks again, my friend. Best wishes, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by badmalthus on Friday, May 27, 2011 (02:48:46)
Each line...each word...screams with love Mary Ann. I love it!
Cheers...Harry

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Friday, May 27, 2011 (15:43:54)
    Heh-heh, you always see right through
    giddy 'ol me... Thanks, Harry
    - Cheers, Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by Tamara on Friday, June 03, 2011 (22:39:50)
Beautifully written, and these are great dramatic lines.

We traveled here and there, seeing all the sights
there ever were to see, from sea to sea to see…


Here, beneath the span of spinning stars I reach
for more than just a lasting taste, your breath
of love breathed into me


The images your poem presents are great.

Best,

Tamara

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Saturday, June 04, 2011 (22:02:56)
    Oh, thank you for saying so, Tamara. Really a true lament, I wrote this while my love was in the hospital back east... I wasn't too sure what might happen. Long story short... he'll be on his way out here in just a few more days! Happy ending... Thanks again my friend. Mary Ann

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Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
by liarbird on Wednesday, February 22, 2012 (01:12:08)
G'day maryann...
After reading your poem I realize what I have been missing.
Amazing...thank you.
Lindsay

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    Re: Uncertainty (Score: 1 )
    by maryanns on Wednesday, February 22, 2012 (14:02:03)
    Thank you for taking me back... I had completely forgotten about writing and posting this one - although alas, not the circumstances. All in all, things are well and happy here. Take care, Mary Ann Very Happy

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