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Poems - A Time To Live A Time To Die
Re: A Time To Live A Time To Die
by butterflyzrfree on Saturday, August 01, 2009 (00:04:44)
Great topic. Why don't you make the lines longer, put two together? It would make the poem stronger, imho. Good topic, could use a bit more depth. Why don't his kids visit? Why is he in the nursing home instead of at home? did he treat them badly? When did his wife die? Does he think of her? If you answered a couple of these core questions, it would add a great deal of depth to this very nice piece.
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