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A Time To Live A Time To Die

by Lou

He looks around and cries,
Eighty four, prays to die
Memories in his hand
Photographs when life was grand.

Through the hell of war,
Friends that died in forty four,
A resident of care
No one comes no one cares,
A son and daughters shame
Inheritance gone
Government gain.

Sleeps now most the day
Stench of urine in the air,
Reverts back to a child
Incontinent pads
That took his pride.
Just one thought to mind,
There’s a time to live,
And a time to die.





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Re: A Time To Live A Time To Die
by butterflyzrfree on Saturday, August 01, 2009 (00:04:44)

Great topic. Why don't you make the lines longer, put two together? It would make the poem stronger, imho. Good topic, could use a bit more depth. Why don't his kids visit? Why is he in the nursing home instead of at home? did he treat them badly? When did his wife die? Does he think of her? If you answered a couple of these core questions, it would add a great deal of depth to this very nice piece.

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