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Poems - Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn

Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn

by Ramonez

It could be dusk, it could be dawn;
the sky’s the same old colour of smog,
here and there dark clouds pull faces –
they make silver-lipped yawns.

It could be dusk, it could be dawn;
factory towers smash the skyline
(badly assembled limbs of smashed stick figures) –
they smoke and scorn.

It could be dusk, it could be dawn;
the breeze carries a fresh taste of motor oil,
dirty rainbows pirouette on airstreams
that taste like burnt popcorn.

It could be dusk, it could be dawn;
nobody’s got time to smile anymore,
permanent bowties between our eyes,
souls truly worn.

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Tags: city life, factories, industrial areas, dreams, modern life

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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn (Score: 1 )
by Dreaming-Demon on Sunday, November 01, 2009 (03:04:49)

Much enjoyed Ramonez...well done

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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn by Ramonez on Monday, November 02

Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn (Score: 1 )
by Madyakka on Sunday, November 01, 2009 (22:56:28)

For me, you captured the heart and soul of the UK in just a few words.
Awesome write Ramon

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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn by Ramonez on Monday, November 02

Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn (Score: 1 )
by electrictiger on Tuesday, November 03, 2009 (17:53:54)

I very much liked this piece. The final stanza is just wonderful. Cheers, tiger.

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Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn by Ramonez on Tuesday, November 03

Re: Candy Stripe Dreams - 4: It could be dusk, it could be dawn (Score: 1 )
by nerdgirl on Tuesday, November 03, 2009 (19:50:26)

As usual, enjoyed. I thought about writing down my dreams before but the dreams I remember are always pretty...I guess you would say dark (or more like hellbound) I dont know why I have dreams like that, I dont write them down because I dont want to remember them. I still do though.... it sucks. Oh well, as long as they dont come true im happy!
I dont know if i said this before but I totally love the name youve given this series. Candy stripe dreams... awesome!

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