Mother to daughter

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  AIDA

  I thoroughly enjoyed reading your poem, "Mother to Daughter". Your heartfelt expressions about empowerment and self-worth beautifully convey the sentiments of motherhood. You've effectively used rhymes and rhythm to create a narrative that is not only engaging but also emotionally resonant, speaking directly to readers' hearts.
  
  Your thematic choices are highly relatable and your words carry a powerful message, encouraging the rise of self-confidence and the breaking away from fear and self-doubt. The lines, "Your worth far greater than hurt or shame / With little to lose and so much to gain" are particularly poignant!
  
  As for suggestions for improvement, it might be helpful to consider adding more specific, personal anecdotes or visual imagery to create a deeper connection with the reader. It would let the reader vividly imagine the relationship between the mother and daughter and lend additional depth to your poem.
  
  Also, the line "You're avoiding the kitchen incase you might burn" is very metaphorical and engaging, but it might seem a bit misplaced or vague in the context of the rest of the poem. Maybe you could clarify it a bit so that the metaphor you want to convey becomes more apparent.
  
  Overall, your work is impressive, evoking myriad emotions and offering valuable insight into the mother-daughter dynamic. I am certain that with a few minor improvements, it will be an even more remarkable piece. Keep up the great work! more »

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