Analysis of At the Diner in Cincinnati, 1975



I eat my lunch with old women
to remind me who I am
under all this plumage

there are six or eight whose
faces occupy the spaces   
in the little booths
but seldom more than four
smile to me when I walk in

they wear hats on their spider-web hair
and gloves on their spotted hands
purses and shopping bags burden them

they come to town to shop for
needles or for stout black shoes
and on holy days the communion rail
at the big church is lined with them,
mouths popped open
like baby birds

each one is a widow,
the half death cast back
into the dimming light and
the shadows of the children
the wedding rings twirl    
where once the flesh was plump

“she is a man’s” was the message
 when the fingers flashed with heat
 and the children stirred
 in each velvet belly
like poppy seeds in the rain

“she was a man’s” the thinning circles say,
 still possessed by something dead
 true to bones in Sunday suits

we drink tea, eat soup,
and I count out the change
for the gray-faced girl
who rattles cups
and drops the spoons

infirm magi, last Christmas
they brought their gifts to me
and among the offerings was
a handkerchief done in red,
silk thread saying “Miami Beach”

I waited for the one
who had handed me the box
to tell me why I held the bit of
cloth with a map and two words
done in stitches like a wound

my son, she said, brought this to me
she named that poppy seed,
the one who went to Florida,
the one who sent her money,
the one who died
and she had a telegram
about a soldier in Korea

I never went to Florida, but
I wept on Miami Beach


Scheme ABC DXXEX XXF EDXFAG XXXAHX CXXIX XJX XXHXX XIXJK AXXGX IXLIXBL XK
Poetic Form
Metre 11111110 1011111 101110 111111 1010010 00101 110111 1111110 111111011 0111101 100101101 1111111 1011111 0110100101 10111111 1110 1101 111010 01111 0101010 011010 01011 110111 11011010 1010111 00101 011010 1101001 1101010101 1011101 111011 11111 011101 10111 1101 0101 0110110 111111 00101001 0100101 11100101 110101 1110101 111111011 1101011 1010101 11111111 111101 01111100 0111010 0111 011010 010100010 110111001 1110101
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,516
Words 302
Sentences 1
Stanzas 12
Stanza Lengths 3, 5, 3, 6, 6, 5, 3, 5, 5, 5, 7, 2
Lines Amount 55
Letters per line (avg) 22
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 101
Words per stanza (avg) 25
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Submitted by jodyserey on May 24, 2021

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Jody Serey

I have lived for four decades in the low desert in Arizona, after growing up in the Midwest. I have never not been a writer of one kind or the other. more…

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