Analysis of Our First Time



Laid upon the stretch of a meadow,
Our grassy digits intersect,
Starlit eyes burn and reflect
As twinkles of origin dance within the crisp white flames,
In the magic of the moment,
Where gravity compelled our footsteps forward
To a collision we smiled toward
And the flaring closeness unfurled,
Giving birth to a tale,
Starring each other’s sun of a different world.

God took to his canvas
Turned traces and colors into a Friday night,
Bled out his paints in the form of full moonlight
With motioned figures in me and you,
Walked to each other in the bright dark hue.

A nightmare started to live,
Drawing breath from my first stuttered words,
Reaping vision from twitching eyes at her raven hair,
With hips growing rhythm from backed steps,
Meters from the flow of her emerald dress.

And in the face of my assembled dismemberment,
She responded with her cotton-soft laugh
Changed our distance from half to none,
Placed her fingertips on mine,
One by one,
Slithered smooth upon a rough palm,
And we moved to a sidewalk horizon
As one glowing sun.

And still we burn,
Beneath the layer of passing breeze,
As mingled toes become lulled
By the memory breathed.
The legs remember those first miles,
Faces remember those first smiles,
And a nova comes to be by the first touch
Relived by the motion of our hands
As time rewound more than the sole pair
Of my watch’s hands.


Scheme XAAXBXXCXC XDDEE XXFXX BXGXGXGG XXXXHHXIFI
Poetic Form
Metre 10101101 10101001 1011001 11011001010111 00101010 11000110110 100101101 00101001 101101 101101101001 111110 110010010101 1111001111 110100101 1111000111 011011 10111111 1010110110101 111010111 1010110101 0001110100100 1010101011 110101111 101011 111 1101011 011101010 11101 0111 010101101 1101011 101001 01010111 10010111 00101111011 0110101101 11111011 1111
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,377
Words 274
Sentences 6
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 10, 5, 5, 8, 10
Lines Amount 38
Letters per line (avg) 29
Words per line (avg) 6
Letters per stanza (avg) 219
Words per stanza (avg) 48

About this poem

A beginning of a relationship recollected by a couple

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Written on January 08, 2022

Submitted by ansahjude2 on January 09, 2022

Modified on March 05, 2023

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Jude Lawrence Ansah

I was born in Accra, Ghana on October 18th, 1995. I am a recent graduate of Ashesi University with a degree in Business Administration. I began my journey as a writer in 2014 while still attending high school at Achimota Senior High, writing a poem for submission into the school magazine. After graduating, poetry became a hobby of mine as I went on to write numerous pieces which ended up being published on my poetry blog “Poet JLA” which has over 146 poems since 2015. I have also performed some of his pieces at events such as “Poetry for The Rainmakers” and the Ashesi University Storytellers Club Event “Cafeteria Takeover”. I am currently a digital content creator for Arkesel Ltd. and am in the process of putting together my anthology coming soon. My other hobbies include graphic design, image manipulation art, photo editing, and playing video games. more…

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