Analysis of Remorse

James Allan 1949 (Paisley)



Beside the wilted candle, a memory lies in dust.
The smell of love long past, is all that's left of lust.
A rumpled robe lays scattered, slippers looking for feet.
A pair of scarlet knickers hide beneath the seat.

It felt so right last night, the music played a beat.
She said “I love you baby” and whisked me off my feet.
We danced and laughed we bought another round,
I looked into her eyes and knew what I had found.

My thoughts were running wild, our passion filled the air.
Small hands that were so gentle, soon led to an affair.
The smell of sweat and stale perfume now permeate the room.
The lust that passed for passion, gone in the morning gloom.

I leave before she lifts her head, she was quite sweet to me.
My conscience pricks, as I depart, I am so sad and so is she.

I never knew her name, she didn't ask me mine.
A number faded on my hand, this passion lost in time.


Scheme AABB BBCC DDEE FF XX
Poetic Form
Metre 01010100100101 011111111111 0101110101011 011101010101 111111010101 1111110011111 1101110101 110101011111 1101011010101 1110110111101 0111010111001 0111110100101 11011101111111 1101110111110111 110101110111 01010111110101
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 918
Words 175
Sentences 16
Stanzas 5
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 2, 2
Lines Amount 16
Letters per line (avg) 42
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 135
Words per stanza (avg) 31

About this poem

A night spent with a girlI I met at a dancehall in Aberdeen 1986 The number is made by a rubber stamp when you enter the dance hall..

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Written on August 15, 2004

Submitted by Scotjimland on February 10, 2023

Modified on March 05, 2023

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