Analysis of Mosh Pit



A tug on my sleeve
Then feeling your hand in mine
My blood pumps faster
I’m panicking but smiling
They clap and you pull away

My hand at my side
Waiting, hoping you’ll grasp it
Listen to screaming
And watch everyone’s heads bop
You join, I hold your glasses

I watch you with them
Complete strangers, just moshing
You fit in perfectly
With your beautiful long hair
And your thick, muscly arms

You’re acting so brave
And I can’t help but smile
I watch your hair move
Your body along with it
The grace I wish to have, hold

Then I start to think
As I watch you, recording
You might be the one
The one I spend my life with
I wouldn’t want someone one else

Please, let it be you
Please be the one that holds me
The one that hugs me
The one that plants small kisses
The one I’m with forever
I know that it’s you
But I don’t know if it’s me
If I’ll be your one
Be your one and your only
Though I always long to be

I know this will hurt
When you eventually leave
And find someone else
And leave me waiting alone
I don’t want to think of it
To think that one day
You might fall into her arms
Girl with the red hair
She’s the one I long to be
Because she’s the one you want

To think of the pain
Is unimaginable
To think that one day
We’ll be nothing but strangers
And maybe former lovers

I know this will hurt
But I know that you’re the one

So I sit and watch you
Your glasses held by my hands
Your trust with just me
When you return, all sweaty
I will be there to greet you


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Poetic Form
Metre 01111 1101101 11110 1100110 1101101 11111 1010111 10110 01111 1111110 11111 011011 110100 1110011 01111 11011 011111 11111 1100111 0111111 11111 1111010 11101 0111111 111111 11111 1101111 01111 0111110 0111010 11111 1111111 11111 1110110 111111 11111 11010001 0111 0111001 1111111 11111 1110101 11011 1011111 0110111 11101 101000 11111 1110110 0101010 11111 1111101 111011 1101111 11111 1101110 1111111
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 1,508
Words 313
Sentences 1
Stanzas 10
Stanza Lengths 5, 5, 5, 5, 5, 10, 10, 5, 2, 5
Lines Amount 57
Letters per line (avg) 20
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 114
Words per stanza (avg) 30

About this poem

This is a poem I wrote about my girlfriend, even though we weren't together at the time. We went to a death metal concert and she went to go mosh. She has really long curly hair so she fit in with the crowd. I have very short hair, so I stood back and held her glasses. This was the moment I realized that she was more than just my crush- she's the love of my life.

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Written on January 30, 2023

Submitted by parkerkory8 on April 02, 2023

Modified by parkerkory8 on April 02, 2023

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