Analysis of 'take your belongings with you'...



it is early morning.
military police are searching
every house
in our vicinity.

as usual,
i am precisely
braving my plan.

the mp are nearing.
i was to witness
a miracle
to visit us
in person,
once more.

i don't know why i tried to
hide
under
the bed.
i categorically hate to use my mind (game)
when i am around my family, friends
and innocent individuals.

said, what am doing here..
thanks the cold in the tiles
reminded me
in a while i will drink cold drink
without bottle, without opening.

returned back
to the very bed
i trust till death set us free once more.

after searching for 'hiding soldier-me under bed'
the mps did their mission
and reminded their boss
'no one is hiding here!'

in a sense,
i was not hiding in my house.

this isnot the miracle
i want to return to the owner.

i said something to dad,
he was busy to attend the mps.

one of the mps was so proud
of the service dad provided them,
just came and gave me the miracle
which dad was to hear me proudly
in a while.

here we are once more
nefsiheir abraham afewerki
remade the miracle for me
forgood.

you have left your belongings,
deliberately...abraham zseamet seven times
fewsi yseana dotibluwa?

i have no idea who the miracle serving mps were. i can't place them.
w h a t an answer!

asmera, zedlyeki kabai alekidiu kimal-alki weys bezia abile kiked...bdewey? kab me'edotat uhaduna, deseit hafeer.

just in case,
if you came across eritreans who are faceless facing their reality as if leaving their belongings....do not hurt them, do not harm them, do not deter them...leave them deep water once more watered...it won't hurt, won't harm, it won't deter the water erranding.


Scheme AABC DCX AEDEFG XXHIXXX JXCXA XIG IFXJ XB DH XB XKDCX GACC XXX KH G XA
Poetic Form Tetractys  (33%)
Metre 111010 10001110 1001 0100100 1100 11010 1011 01110 11110 0100 1101 010 11 1111111 1 10 01 10100111111 1110111001 01000100 111101 101001 0101 00111111 011001100 011 10101 111111111 1010110101101 011110 001011 111101 001 11110011 110100 111011010 111011 111010101 1101111 101010101 110110100 11111110 001 11111 1101 01010011 1 1111010 11101 111 1110101010010101111 100101110 111111111111111 101 11101101110101101110111111111110111110111111111010101
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 1,695
Words 349
Sentences 30
Stanzas 16
Stanza Lengths 4, 3, 6, 7, 5, 3, 4, 2, 2, 2, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1, 2
Lines Amount 55
Letters per line (avg) 23
Words per line (avg) 5
Letters per stanza (avg) 80
Words per stanza (avg) 19
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Written on September 03, 2023

Submitted by Yuknno.ghirmay on September 03, 2023

Modified by Yuknno.ghirmay on September 03, 2023

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