Analysis of Holding On in the Storm. (Part I)



In the dawn of love's sweet light,
We vowed to hold each other tight.
A union born of joy and laughter,
Promised 'forever and ever after.'

But fate, unkind, with shadows cast,
Brought storms that our young love surpassed.
Her brother's loss, a wound so deep,
Began the descent, a harrowing steep.

Then tragedy struck once more, unkind,
Her second brother left behind.
Her world crumbled, her spirit broke,
In sorrow's grip, life's cruel joke.

Her mind, a fortress now breached and torn,
Became a field where nightmares spawned.
Seeking solace in strangers' arms,
Chasing relief from haunting harms.

Her mind, once a haven of dreams so bright,
Became a battleground, day and night.
Affairs with shadows, pills in hand,
A desperate grasp at sinking sand.

Our home, once filled with love's warm glow,
Became a stage for a tragic show.
Nights of turmoil, days of dread,
Fear for what might lie ahead.

The pets, our little innocent souls,
Bore witness to the toll.
Their fear mirrored in my sleepless eyes,
As I guarded our fractured paradise.

Through police calls and hospital stays,
In the maze of her mind's darkened ways,
I stood by her, though torn and worn,
A heart heavy, a soul forlorn.

As our lease ended, a daunting change loomed,
In our shared space, memories entombed.
For her, the thought of moving, too stark,
A life unraveling, lost in the dark.

Divorce papers, a silent, mournful blow,
Her world, a maelstrom of woe.
Family turned away, no job in sight,
Her life's fabric torn, devoid of light.

That fateful night, in fear, I made the call,
A wellness check, her last wall.
Paramedics found her, pain's raw deal,
Claiming demons she must repeal.

To the hospital, she was swiftly taken,
Her mind, her soul, profoundly shaken.
In her darkest hour, her spirit cleft,
With wounds so deep, so bereft.

Upon release, with truths laid bare,
She whispered of a life in despair.
"I cannot be alone," her voice, a crack,
In her eyes, a world of black.

"Stay," I said, "under this shared roof,
Let this home be your unspoken proof."
Separate lives, yet together we stood,
In a bond forged by misunderstood.

Separate rooms, a house divided,
Yet in care, we were united.
Days are calmer, the rage less frequent,
In the ruins, a strange sort of decent.

In this journey of love, through shadows and light,
I've held her hand with all my might.
For even when love's path is obscure,
It's in the enduring, we find love pure.

In the garden of life, where thorns abound,
I've stood by her, my loyalty sound.
For love is not just joy and laughter,
It's staying true, through every hereafter.


Scheme AABB CCDD EEFF GXHH AAII JJKK XXXX LLGG MMNN JJAA OOPP QQRR SSTT UUVV WWXX AAYY ZZBB
Poetic Form Quatrain  (88%)
Metre 0011111 11111101 010111010 1001001010 1101111 111101101 01010111 0100101001 110011101 01010101 01100101 0111101 010101101 0101111 10100101 10011101 0110101111 01010101 0111101 01011101 101111111 010110101 111111 1111101 0110101001 110101 111001101 1110101010 10110101 001101101 11101101 01100101 11011001011 0101110001 100111011 0101001001 0110010101 0101011 1001011101 011010111 1101011101 0101011 01010111 10101101 1010111010 010101010 0010100101 1111101 01011111 110101001 1101010101 0010111 11110111 111110101 101101011 00111001 10101010 10110010 111001110 0010011110 0110111101 11011111 110111101 1000101111 0010111101 111011001 111111010 11011100010
Closest metre Iambic tetrameter
Characters 2,597
Words 538
Sentences 33
Stanzas 17
Stanza Lengths 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 68
Letters per line (avg) 29
Words per line (avg) 7
Letters per stanza (avg) 117
Words per stanza (avg) 27

About this poem

This is a 20yr true story about my (ex)wife that suffered major mental illness and how I, to this day, stay with her through it. Fights and all.

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Written on December 06, 2023

Submitted by rickscorpio on December 06, 2023

Modified by rickscorpio on January 27, 2024

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