Analysis of Dump-Date Suicide



I remember I dumped you on that one date
Two years ago I said that I would be your soul mate
I told you we would always be a pair
I told you as I held you that I’d always be there
I love, I’m sorry, there’s always another guy
Your yelling, your screaming, you keep asking why
You run into your house with tears down your face
Ripping off your dress, tearing at the lace
I hear you crying from outside
I said the words soul mate I’m sorry I lied

There is a sudden scream and the crying stopped
My face faded of color as my heart dropped
I ran to the front door which was evidently locked
My hands slipping on the doorknob as I was mocked
Right then and there I knocked down the door
I don’t care if I have to pay money I don’t care anymore
I ran to your room going over stair by stair
I open up the door to find nobody there
I searched the house, every inch
Fingers slammed in the doors but I didn’t feel a pinch
I opened up the restroom door, your lying in the bath
I was standing there right then waiting to feel your wrath
I love you girl I said but you don’t even move
So I ran to you gathered you up in my arms and felt every groove
I love you girl please answer me, please girl please
Then I saw the blood running from your wrists to your knees
I said to myself why god why god me
I’m hurting really, really bad can’t you see
So I take out my pocket knife and slit my wrists too
Cause if I’m going to die tonight I would want to die with you  
Copyright © Jase Pinski | Year Posted 2021


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Poetic Form
Metre 10101111111 1101111111111 111111101 111111111111 11110110101 11011011101 11011111111 1011110101 11110111 11011111011 11010100101 11101101111 1110111110001 111010101111 110111101 111111111011101 111111010111 1101011111 11011001 101001111101 1101011110001 1110111101111 111111111101 111111011011011001 11111101111 1110110111111 111111111 11010101111 1111110101111 1111011011111111 1011110
Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 1,487
Words 309
Sentences 1
Stanzas 2
Stanza Lengths 10, 21
Lines Amount 31
Letters per line (avg) 37
Words per line (avg) 10
Letters per stanza (avg) 580
Words per stanza (avg) 155
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Submitted on January 29, 2021

Modified on March 14, 2023

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