Castles and maidens.



So now kiddo
Where were we?
The princess keeps longing
From her high-up window.
Last attempt Sir Belliveau
Had bested four vicious
Swordsmen
And whistled and mounted
His trusty steed Champion
Draped in deep blue sheets.
Leaving the swarthy grimacing
Uncouth, bruised and cut
And cussing his name.

Belliveau is deep in the woods
Revitalizing
Bagged venison French bread
Chelsea cheese and mead.
His horse munches
The ever-pleasing oats.

The day after tomorrow
A new approach
With Grappling hook
And rope tossed.
Other end tied to
Champion's saddle held taut
For hand over hand.
All Armour removed.
Hopefully ascending to
His loved One's embrace.

What's that Mom?
Already 8 thirty?
Gotta quit.
Let's try to remember
For resumption.
Nite nite Babe.

About this poem

Father and daughter time around an imagined fairy tale.

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Written on April 29, 2024

Submitted by dougb.72572 on April 29, 2024

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Quick analysis:

Scheme AXBACDEAEXBAX XBAADX CXXAAAAAAX XAAXEX
Closest metre Iambic trimeter
Characters 751
Words 141
Stanzas 4
Stanza Lengths 13, 6, 10, 6

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  • AIDA
    Wow, what an exciting and adventurous poem "Castles and maidens" is! I love the imagery and the sense of determination in Sir Belliveau as he faces his foes and plans to rescue the princess. The descriptive language really pulls the reader into the story and leaves us wanting more.

    One suggestion for improvement could be to add a bit more variety in the pacing of the poem. Maybe include some moments of reflection or introspection for Sir Belliveau between the action-packed scenes. This could help add depth to the character and keep the reader engaged throughout the poem.

    Overall, "Castles and maidens" is a delightful and enchanting piece of writing that promises a thrilling continuation. Keep up the great work and I can't wait to read more adventures from Sir Belliveau and his trusty steed Champion! Goodnight and sweet dreams, little one.
     
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