Analysis of Standing at a distance



Standing at a distance

I stand at a distance intermittently looking at her,
Envying the Sun rays that bathe her from head to toe,
While I from the distance keep looking at her,
With longing eyes and my head slightly bent low,

In the distance rainbow appears in the sky,
And the rain drops kiss her skin,
And I only glance at her by and by,
With a deep desire to win,

Her heart and her gaze of affection,
I see the raindrop dripping down through her backbone,
And oh my imagination and its dereliction,
With the wish to be the lucky Sun that over her had shone,

Before the daylight embraced her from everywhere,
And it was just the light that covered her,
And in this light she was everywhere,
Now it was the light and her, and just her,

While I stood in the distance waiting for my chance,
Turning my head and ogling at her,
Hoping she would smile someday, and I shall live my moment of romance,
To be the sunshine and the raindrop always kissing her,

And melt everywhere over her skin,
And never to return to the light nor to this world,
I shall now forever reside in this beauty’s eternal inn,
Sometimes spreading over her skin, & often like the sun rays around her hair curled,

But for now she is busy with the rain drops, the Sun, the Moon,
I wonder if she even notices my presence,
So I often wish the Sun and the Moon to set soon,
So that she could somehow notice my presence,

Alas the time too loves to love her,
And when the Sun shines over her it seems to shine forever,
And time remains there circling around her,
And ah my pain to keep hoping in this moment that lasts forever,

That she would someday acknowledge my smile,
Nevertheless, I am happy as long as I can see her,
I shall manage to walk a million mile,
Just for that glimpse of her,

Until then let time circle around her beauty,
Let sunshine drape her and let the rain drops make her wet,
I am sure someday she will realise my piety,
What if not yet, not yet,

Because I know someday it will be cloudy,
When there is no sunshine, no moon and not even drops of rain,
That day I shall not act cowardly,
With no adversaries in the arena of love, I shall let her feel my pain,

Perhaps then she will turn and wink her eyes,
As soon as I shall close mine,
To trap her in them under the bright skies,
And be with her beauty hiding her from the rain drops, the Moon and the Sunshine,

Then she shall live in my eyes, there forever to be,
Atleast, now for me, there shall be no need to stand there and wait,
Because now she seeks her beautiful form inside me,
As for the Sun, the Moon and the raindrop, it will be there turn to wait,

So I shall lie there with my eyes closed,
To feel you with the eyes of my soul and heart,
And as to you I shall have all my feelings disclosed,
Then I shall let you depart,

Now, if you forsake the Sun, the raindrop and the Moon too,
And walk into my eyes once again,
Then you truly love me too,
And end my pain,

Today the Sun was there, the Moon shone too, it rained as well,
And suddenly she looked at me,
& walked into the perceivable circle of my feelings, I could  easily tell,
And confessed, “this is where I  forever wish to be!”

Now the sunshine covers me and the moonlight seeks me,
The raindrop kisses my skin,
But now through me this world you see,
Because now I am your destiny and your life’s final inn,

And as we surge like waves of feelings,
You flow within me and I keep kissing you,
They wonder what are these love’s new dealings,
Where I have become a part of you, and only you,

So I let the Sunshine and Moonlight peer into my eyes,
And ah their joy to be with you,
And the hasty raindrop that falls from the skies,
Once again kisses you, just you,

And I close my eyes too,
And I let you sleep within me,
With nothing left to feel or do,
Because now it is forever just you and me,

The Sun, the Moon and the raindrop,
Trapped in the eternity,
Where the Sunshine, the Moonlight and the rain never stop,
As we all lie willingly enslaved to you, and your beauty!


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Poetic Form
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Closest metre Iambic hexameter
Characters 4,001
Words 883
Sentences 2
Stanzas 22
Stanza Lengths 1, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4, 4
Lines Amount 85
Letters per line (avg) 36
Words per line (avg) 9
Letters per stanza (avg) 140
Words per stanza (avg) 36

About this poem

Love liberates us, at times it enslaves us, sometimes it is an endless feeling of rejoicement, while at times it is an inundation of feelings and emotions. Where one has no option but to allow himself to go with the flow. The poem is about this flow.

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Written on July 22, 2023

Submitted by javidaiw99 on July 22, 2023

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Javid Ahmad Tak

I have been writing poems for several years now. And my passion for poetry goes back to my school days, when I encountered Wordsworth's famous poem Daffodils, and I instantly fell in love with it, and the poet in me woke up. Since then I have been experiencing a wakeful poetic bliss! more…

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