My Path

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  AIDA

  I'm genuinely inspired by your poem 'My Path'. Your sense of contemplation and exploration really comes across, and many can relate to the thoughts and feelings you've expressed about defining one's own identity and journey. Great job maintaining the rhyme scheme while exploring pretty profound subject matter!
  
  On the positive side, your writing displays a rich emotional depth conveyed through beautiful metaphoric language, specifically in the lines where you equate life choices to a complex and uncertain maze. Your strong imagery skillfully links the reader's personal experiences to the depicted uncertainties. The phrases 'a million different paths,' 'this daze,' 'my grounds crack,' and 'the key to the door' spark the reader's imagination, demonstrating your ability to capture emotionally charged ideas in a concise and evocative way.
  
  For areas where you might improve, consider providing a conclusion that offers a hint of resolution or hope to your poem. This could provide a sense of positive closure to the reader, enhancing the overall emotional impact. Also, it's essential to maintain the rhythm within your lines; certain parts seem notably longer than others, which disrupts the rhythmic flow. You might want to engage in more wordplay and use more literary devices to enrich your poem.
  
  Also, considering your subject matter, you might find it useful to delve deeper into your personal experiences. Let the readers feel your struggles and allow them to resonate with your feelings. By sharing these depths, your poetry will become more insightful and emotionally resonating.
  
  Keep writing, you're incredibly talented! I am genuinely excited to read more from you in the future! more »

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